Under my skin

[joeym]

Hey all,
new one, just finished a first mix. Lyrics collab with RayC, guitar solo at the end by my friend Chris Frehse. Would be great to hear what you think.

http://www.box.net/shared/i43m844jdm

And here's what Ray and me came up with:

Under my skin

Suicide’s angel’s waiting
Eternity seals my fate
Numb but elated
Each time leaves a stain

Colour me crazy
Colour me blind
Stun me amaze me
With all of your might
I feel you closing
In for the kill
I feel you creeping
Under my skin

Deadly sweet caresses
Alive still I’m dead
I love you I hate you
By blood we are wed

Colour me crazy……

Empty promise
A poison divine
Senses on fire
My desire

Black widow lover
You float you hover
No patient mother
Too weak to fight


Cheers

 

[jeffmaher]

Bass drum is big and boomy. Mebbe that's what y' wanted. Other than that, all net. Listening on mixing phones.

 

[Greg_L]

I'm not crazy about the vocal effect in the verses. Too thick. I like the idea, but dial it down a good bit. I like the rhythm tones a lot, but they're a little overpowering in this early mix. Snare and bass could be louder. I love the rocking ending, although the drums get lost in all the commotion. I'd like to hear more of that in your recordings....the straight rocking I mean. Your drum programming is very very good, but sometimes it gets a little too busy, like in this song. It's all a matter of taste, but for me, the song doesn't ever seem to "gel". Too much syncopation and choppiness. There's no headbanging moment until the ending. I try to get into it but it's like doing math homework.

The vocals are stellar as always and I think you dialed in some good sounds for the kit. Just a few more tweaks and you're good to go.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

Not sure if my ears are playing tricks on me, but seems like the drums are just a bit too far ahead of the music. More evident at the beginning than the rest of the song... I'd nudge the drum track back just a hair.

Great song, dude!

 

[7string]

Cool tune, Joey! I have to agree with Greg L about the vocal effect. Your recent stuff seems to have a lot of that going on. I love the drums! I don't care if they're busy, but they do tend to get lost toward the end. I thought the rhythm guitars sounded a bit bright to me but after the second listen they seemed ok. Both solo's were AWESOME! Vocals are just what I expected... FREAKIN' AWESOME!!!!!


Great song!

 

[joeym]

Bass drum is big and boomy. Mebbe that's what y' wanted. Other than that, all net. Listening on mixing phones.

I did want it big, but not excessively boomy. Might have overdone it. Ok, taking note for the next mix. Thanx Jeff!

 

[philbagg]

That solo at the end kicks some serious ASS.

It reminded me of the solo at the end of Paradise City. It doesn't sound like it, but that's when that song takes off and thrusts its crotch in your face

Good work Joey Joe Joe

 

[joeym]

I'm not crazy about the vocal effect in the verses. Too thick. I like the idea, but dial it down a good bit. I like the rhythm tones a lot, but they're a little overpowering in this early mix. Snare and bass could be louder. I love the rocking ending, although the drums get lost in all the commotion. I'd like to hear more of that in your recordings....the straight rocking I mean. Your drum programming is very very good, but sometimes it gets a little too busy, like in this song. It's all a matter of taste, but for me, the song doesn't ever seem to "gel". Too much syncopation and choppiness. There's no headbanging moment until the ending. I try to get into it but it's like doing math homework.

The vocals are stellar as always and I think you dialed in some good sounds for the kit. Just a few more tweaks and you're good to go.

Ha...golden ears!
Yeah, effect on the verse might be too thick, I'll have to fix that. I wasn't sure if the guitars were a bit too loud, is that what you mean with the rhythms? I have to see about the drums overall, because the solo guitar in the end might be interfering with their frequency and drowning them out a bit. You're right about the hectic drums, especially in the verses, the kick is doing too much. I'll be taming it down a bit. And yeah. it is kind of a strange song sometimes....
...and I've always detested maths...
Thanx for the help, Greg!

 

[joeym]

Not sure if my ears are playing tricks on me, but seems like the drums are just a bit too far ahead of the music. More evident at the beginning than the rest of the song... I'd nudge the drum track back just a hair.

Great song, dude!

Thanx Jason!
the problem might be the kick, I'll check....

 

[joeym]

Cool tune, Joey! I have to agree with Greg L about the vocal effect. Your recent stuff seems to have a lot of that going on. I love the drums! I don't care if they're busy, but they do tend to get lost toward the end. I thought the rhythm guitars sounded a bit bright to me but after the second listen they seemed ok. Both solo's were AWESOME! Vocals are just what I expected... FREAKIN' AWESOME!!!!!


Great song!

Hey Jeff!
I'm actually pretty old school but I like to give a modern touch here and there. But the effect is too thick on this mix. Thanx for the comments!

 

[joeym]

That solo at the end kicks some serious ASS.

It reminded me of the solo at the end of Paradise City. It doesn't sound like it, but that's when that song takes off and thrusts its crotch in your face

Good work Joey Joe Joe

I wanted just that effect with the ending 'cos this is probably gonna be the closing song on the CD.
Now have a Guinness on me Phil!

 

[Greg_L]

I wasn't sure if the guitars were a bit too loud, is that what you mean with the rhythms?

Yeah just a little too loud.

 

[philbagg]

I wanted just that effect with the ending 'cos this is probably gonna be the closing song on the CD.
Now have a Guinness on me Phil!

Half the time, Guinness to the Irish is like Fosters to the Aussies, it's hated here.

But they're idiots. I'd murder a guinness right now

 

[joeym]

Half the time, Guinness to the Irish is like Fosters to the Aussies, it's hated here.

But they're idiots. I'd murder a guinness right now

It's so hard for me to get a fresh one here in Krautland.....

 

[philbagg]

Sorry, I forgot to add (you mentioned Guinness, I drooled )

Is that ending in 6/8 or 4/4? The drums got kinda lost so I can't tell, I'm assuming 6/8?

Also, the solo should go on for at least a minute longer if it's gonna be a closer

Very impressive playing, you're a very talented player

 

[philbagg]

It's so hard for me to get a fresh one here in Krautland.....

Nicest Guinness ever: Come to Dublin, and take a tour of the Brewery at St. James Gate. Skip the tour, go straight to the gravity bar at the top floor. They give you a voucher for a free one. It'll knock your socks off

 

[joeym]

Nicest Guinness ever: Come to Dublin, and take a tour of the Brewery at St. James Gate. Skip the tour, go straight to the gravity bar at the top floor. They give you a voucher for a free one. It'll knock your socks off

Ha...I'll bet it would (drool.....)
Solo on the song wasn't played by me. I left it for Chris 'cos he's an amazing guitar player.

 

[heatmiser]

This sounds great. You've already been given a lot of ideas here...

Vocals are the usual - total awesomeness - although I agree the effect towards the beginning is a bit too much.

I would suggest dialing back some of the drum fills a bit...I figure there's supposed to be a lot more of that going on with this style than many others, but I still think that a bit less rhythmic complexity might make the whole thing gel better.

Overall a fine recording indeed.

 

[ocnor]

I think that your drum mix is making everything sound murky and unfocused. The kick is way too boomy and sounds like it's right next to your head. The hats and cymbals sound like they are 15 feet away and the snare and toms sound like they are in the next room. Imo this type of tune requires the drums to be a bit dryer.

 

[Dogbreath]

JoeyDude!

Awesome as usual
I can hear about the kick. I like it but it makes the hats and snare sound distant. Maybe just up a skosh on those. Maybe the cymbals too.

Just nits but for the most part, this is muy excellent.