Your thoughts on this song I'm going to submit to a contest

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So, I ran across this contest via myspace:

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendid=370072649

I'm sure many of you have run across it as well...I think it's a good exercise in songwriting.

After reading the rules, I figured I'd put something together and drop my song in the hat. Before I submit it though, I need to get some trusted feedback from you all...let me know what you think of the mix, feel of the song, etc.

Here is the link...it's called "Walk the Wire"

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6616588

Thanksalot!!

Brad
 
That's pleasant. Pixies meets Weezer or something. I was hoping it would elevate after the lead section, somehow. A higher or more emotionally charged vocal. Not necessarily screaming, but a bit more zippety doo dah, as it gets a bit forgettable after the mid-point.
 
Sounds pretty good to me. Not sure about the telephone effect on the vocals or the last naked chord, but otherwise I think it's really good. Good luck with the contest.
 
I thought the mix was really good..bass did fall out a bit during the chorus when the guitars got louder. Some good dynamics and good backup vox. Liked it.
 
Thanks all for your input. It's always good to have a new perspective on a song, especially after going through the writing, recording, and mixing process.

Xeries, I think I'm going to leave in the "telephone effect". I was really going for something that's a bit different from run of the mill.

As far as the chord right at the end, I like the fact that it sort of puts a period on the end of the song....on the other hand, didn't someone say to always end a song on a suspended note or something to leave the listener wanting more?
 
I liked it. I thought it was very catchy. The telephone thing was cool I thought. As for the chord at the end, it was a bit strange. It was just there. No reverb, nothing. It just sounded like you tacked it on at the end.
 
I like it too. Nice songwriting and performance.

I don't care that much for the ending chord on the guitar... having the other instruments drop out there. It sounds disjointed to me.
 
That settles it then, I'll cut that final chord...no major surgery involved in doing such (the wonders of the digital age!!). It was a bit of a spontaneous thing when I cut the track, and it doesn't seem to really add anything, so off it goes.

Thanks again to all for the helpful feedback.
 
The drums don't sound good all by themselves. Start the drums with the bass.

Nice chord progression, love the lyrics.

You have a very nice voice - I'd like to hear what it sounds like wide open. Failing that, I'd love to hear this track fairly squashed with an LA-2A.

Well-balanced and conventional. The lo-fi break doesn't work for me, but I can see where you're going with it.

Thanks for sharing!
 
Ch Ch Ch Changes...

So, as I was about to submit this thing to the contest, I decided I'd take a quick glance at the rules again. Somewhere in my excitement, I realized I'd overlooked the requirement that the song must be titled "Henry Poole Is Here" and the lyric "Henry Poole Is Here" must be included in the song. Oops.

The title change...no biggie. The lyric...ouch.

After thinking about how in the hell to do this without rewriting and recording the vocals, I decided to tack it to the end of the song and I think it worked out pretty tastfully. At least it'll make them listen to the whole thing (maybe) before they get to the "tagline."

Supercreep, thanks for the comments. I just fiddled around a bit with starting it out with the bass and drums, and I like it both ways...I'm gonna sleep on it.

As far as the lo-fi thing goes, my thinking is that there's probably going to be like 20,000 songs submitted for this deal and I wanted to do something a little different (without getting too wild and crazy) to make it stand out in the crowd. Plus I thought it was good for the song's dynamics.

Anyways, I'm going to quit beating this horse. Take a listen to the changes if you'd like, and wish me luck.

Brad
 
Wow, whoever said Pixies meets Weezer is dead on. Cool song. I like the thumpy bass. I don't really like the drum sound in the intro, but it works once the song gets rolling. The mix sounds good. Who the hell is Henry Poole anyway?
 
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