We are looking for song and recording critiques.

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My partner and I collaborate on original songs. I am in Florida (songwriter and vocalist). My partner is in Arizona (guitarist).

I just upgraded to a new Focusrite Saffire Pro 24 DSP soundcard. My partner has re-mic-ed his flat top. We are interested in your comments about the recording dynamics, clarity as well as the song composition.

Thanks for your time, and we do not mind critical comments. We want to improve.

Marc
 
Marc, you guys have a very good sound. I thoroughly enjoyed the song and performance.

Bob
 
Thanks Bob. Also switched to an AKG mic. My studio is far from soundproof, but I have fought to suppress floor noise. All comments gladly received.

Marc
 
Yeah My voice is rather inflexible. It works better with somber melodies. This is a bit happy for my tone! Thanks for your thoughts.

Marc
 
. Nice overall. would like to feel "closer" to the music... possibly has to do with mic placement, or maybe eq, particularly on the guitar. I think you could get a much nicer guitar tone with a little work on mic placement, possibly switch to a regular acoustic from the flat-top if one is available, just my opinion of course ;)
 
lastdays said:
. Nice overall. would like to feel "closer" to the music... possibly has to do with mic placement, or maybe eq, particularly on the guitar. I think you could get a much nicer guitar tone with a little work on mic placement, possibly switch to a regular acoustic from the flat-top if one is available, just my opinion of course ;)
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+1 On the acoustic. Nice playing, but it sounds distant and has a real lack of high freqs.
Call me crazy, but your vocal timbre reminds me of David Bowie.
 
I get "Leonard Cohen, Neil Diamond and Johnny Cash" all the time! I'll take a "Bowie"!!! Thanks.

I'll talk to my guitarist about his set up. It could sound a lot richer, but I do not mic instruments. Thanks again.

Marc
 
I think this is pretty bad. The lyrics are really dumb. I write dumb lyrics all the time, and I'm usually very forgiving of dumb lyrics, so for me to think they're dumb, they must be really really dumb. This is like something you'd hear on Sesame Street. "Today kids, we're gonna sing a song about new and old. Yay!" The guitar playing is very good though. Nice playing. The recorded sound could be way better, but he plays it well. The vocal delivery is shaky and the vibrato seems forced and unnatural. I dunno, I'm not trying to be overly negative, but this is just a trainwreck to me.
 
Then again...the lyrics may SEEM dumb to a person lacking in intelligence. I would opine (based on comments from other threads you are in) that your perception makes the lyrics deeper and more perceptive.

My partner really is a good player. We're working on his recorded sound.

Thanks for taking the time to jump in. The more critiques the merrier.

Marc
 
Lyrics and style are a strange mix, How many songs have gotten away with "baby baby baby"? (millions)

The problem I have with this is that I'm not quite sure of the point of the song. The style suggests I should be getting a word picture when I listen. Is it supposed to be a farther and son thing? Is it a bitch about the modern world? Or what? It needs to be far more personal and to the point...

Nice production, good sound.
 
A lot of my lyrics are oblique. I'll share this one with ya, Tobe.

The song is about my 2 dogs. One was suffering from terminal lymphoma (he passed away last week). The other is my 6 month old puppy. I started realizing the differences in the 2, and quantifying which attributes I liked best in the new pup and the older dog. How they got what they wanted, and how it affected my perception of them.

The point? New and old are different, but which is better may well depend on where YOU are in life and how you're seeing things that day. You can be old and feel new. That's where I am after watching my dog pass.

Hope that solves one of life's very small mysteries. Thanks for really listening to this one, Tobe. I appreciate it.

Marc
 
moohead said:
Then again...the lyrics may SEEM dumb to a person lacking in intelligence. I would opine (based on comments from other threads you are in) that your perception makes the lyrics deeper and more perceptive.

My partner really is a good player. We're working on his recorded sound.

Thanks for taking the time to jump in. The more critiques the merrier.

Marc
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Hey, don't get mad. You asked for comments.

New and old are different
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Yeah, that's groundbreaking. Really "oblique".
 
Thanks for the "bump" Greg! Now...back to the original thread! Thanks to everyone making constructive comments.

Marc
 
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