"wannbe" a song written by the 13 yearold engineer!

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"wannabe" a song written by the 13 yearold engineer!

hi guys! it me again, but i'm not 13 anymore. my birthday was sep-21 so i'm now 14! here's a song that i wrote,played and recorded. it took me about 2 months to write it and about 2 weeks to record it.

i recorded the guitars and bass (direct) the vocal was recorded with a nady scm900,the tamberine was recorded with the same mic and the drums where recorded with a sm57 on snare, 2 603s as overheads and a beta 52 inside the kick. i recorded all the guitars trough my zoom gfx-707 guitar effects pedal.

the name is: "wannabe"

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/?aid=1775/singles

let me know what you guys think.


thanks for reading,

zeke
 
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sounds pretty darn good my man..
"hands are tied with all my sins"....very good line there....
solo sounded great......only thing and really you cant help this is is controlling your voice.....your just at the age where that happens to be pretty hard....that'l change....no biggie i thought you did a real nice job here..

cool
jamal
 
another case of way too talented to ever make it in the bizz...

Taking charge and doing youre own work ? What ? Thinking for yourself ????

Blasphemy!

Good start man. The cynic in me says youll see all the lazy self indulgent crap in the record biz and get sick of working so hard. But if you can ignore it and keep on keeping on, I think youll do GREAT!
 
Hey Zeke... this isn't too bad... that rhythm guitar reminds me of some song... trying to remember... ah... it's from "Pearl Jam"/"Yield"... a track called "No Way"... check it out... sounds like your riff, and guitar sound :)

That break at 3:14 is really cool! :) Your stuff seems heavily influenced by the 70s, Zeke. Do the parents listen to that? ;) Nice efforts.
 
nice work zeke........it sounds like you've got some good mics, next time you should try micing up an amp instead of the zoom.......the zoom doesn't sounds bad, but micing up the amp could add some killer dimension to the track........i'd look into remixing that main distorted guit that kicks in and out, turn it up a little and let it rock.............

you've got dedication, spending two weeks to record something shows you've got the patience it's gonna take to be great......i can't spend 2 days on a recording before i'm tired of it and on to something else
 
I like the guitar tones, but the overall mix is a bit too vocal-oriented for my taste. I like the drum sound alot and I would really like to hear it better. Right now it's way in the back behind vocal and guitars.


ps. i think we all know your age by now...
 
That was really pretty good, man. The recording is so, so. But I don't think it matters right now. Your arrangement was really impressive. Your lyrics were good, good topic.
Just stick to it. I think you have an early start on a good thing.
 
Zeke you young rascal you! I'm very impressed. I've heard tunes here by guys twice your age not one tenth as good. I think I'll declare you the BBS mascott. Very, very good job. :D
 
Keep it up bro - I wish I could produce stuff like that when I was your age - you've got the drive and potential to be quite the music badass. I dig the lyrics, music, tone - I can't wait for your next one to check out.

~ Mr. Tom
 
whipper snapper!!!

great job.. vocals may be a bit loud..

keep crankin'!
 
Good job my fellow VF-16'er.

I was just learning chords when I was your age.

Keep at it Zeke.
 
Alright! Great groove there. Nice vocals and good writing! Very nice playing.

The mix sounded good over here (in lo-fi) ... Good job on this! :)
 
holy shit, did anyone else listen to the cover of Come Together?! You've got the sound of that song down perfect!!!
 
yeah. i posted a thread here mabye a month ago. but i'm realy glad that you liked it!
 
Llarion Reviews....

You are one talented young man! You're good enough that I feel comfortable being completely honest with you with my analysis of your tuneage. Listening now; I'll go instrument by instrument with my critique:

Drums:
RIGHT on the money! :) No complaints at all. Nice, fat, MEATY sound. The click track helped you a lot! Tempo meanderings are the bane of a mature sound.

Bass:
Expressive and throbby, if not especially well defined. Personally, I'd try to get a little edge into them, but that's subjective.

Primary rhythm guitar:
Well played, no musical issues, but it¡¦s a mite dry and upfront compared to the other instruments. Just a smidge of the same 'verb that's on the drums, and back it off about 5% in the mix. The G string was a mite sharp.

Secondary "fuzz" guitar:
Three words - JUST BARELY AUDIBLE. Pump it up a good 20%, and get some more upper mids (about 2KHz) into it. It needs to be more than just a suggestion of sound to add the meat to the sound you seem to have been shooting for.

Tertiary "tremolo effects" guitar:
Unnecessary. Over-panned to the left, distracted me from the lead guitar. Cluttered the overall sound up a bit, it was too much a departure form the established sound to blend well. Leave that sound to Chris Isaac, it's not right for this piece... ;)

Lead guitar:
Straight up; Tune it, and recut the solos. Nice soloing, but the axe was WAY out of tune, ruined it :( Especially at the end.

Vocals:
Lots of great ideas and very solid execution. I can hear the punch-ins, but that's only because the vox are also, like the primary rhythm guitar, just a tad dry and a tad upfront. Moisten them out and back em down a teeny notch, and they will blend better. If you can run them through a tube compressor emulator (T-Racks), so much the better. Nice balls on the high B naturals! :D

Arrangement:
Nicely done, added one ingredient too many with that 3rd guitar as I mentioned. No other complaints.

Musicianship:
You're quite a good drummer now, and the rest of your chops are coming along nicely. By the time you're 18, you're going to be a force to be reckoned with if you keep up at this rate.

Mixing:
The bottom end (bass/drums) is pretty much spot on. The guitars have some unevenness in them, and the vox need a little post-production polish, but overall, a nice "upper-end demo" patina.

Overall:
A most impressive outing! Well above a lot of other demos and even finished works I've heard. One of the best sounds I've heard from your age group, ever. SO glad you're into REAL music, and have not fallen prey to Boy-Band idiocy. Well done, once again!!

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Phil "Llarion: The Jazzinator" Traynor
www.llarion.com
-Do not meddle in the affairs of dragons;
for you are crunchy, and go well with ketchup.
 
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