Unfinished Tune - Ideas, suggestions?

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Here's a tune called "Too Much" that I'm working on presently. No vocals or lead break as yet, but the vocals are all written & ready to go... Musically, its pretty basic, but the theme is somewhat harrowing (co-dependent relationships), so I'm trying to evoke a creepy, desperate atmosphere. Any suggestions as to instrumentation or sounds are welcome. Guitars at this stage are just Pod sounds, but I plan to re-amp at a later stage.
BTW, the drums were tracked using a new setup, so I'm keen to hear opinions / suggestions on them.

http://www.4shared.com/audio/VU5RiJIT/Too_Much_-_Prelim.html
 
Hi.
I think it's definitely worth to keep working on it. I like the wah and chorus, but I'm thinking there's a bit too much of it. My biggest criticism would be the lack of difference between the 'verses' and the 'choruses' (e.g. 3:02-3:14 as chorus and what comes after as verse). I think the loudness feel is great for the calmer parts, but when the song should 'break out' it feels like it's too distant. It tries to take off but doesn't.
Hope that helps. If you feel like commenting on the music on my homepage, that would be swell.
Vincent
 
singlespeak said:
Hi.
I think it's definitely worth to keep working on it. I like the wah and chorus, but I'm thinking there's a bit too much of it. My biggest criticism would be the lack of difference between the 'verses' and the 'choruses' (e.g. 3:02-3:14 as chorus and what comes after as verse). I think the loudness feel is great for the calmer parts, but when the song should 'break out' it feels like it's too distant. It tries to take off but doesn't.
Hope that helps. If you feel like commenting on the music on my homepage, that would be swell.
Vincent
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Thanks for listening & commenting...Not sure that if by "wah" you mean tremolo, but yeah, I agree - I think I'm going to take that effect off during the chorus. You're right about where the chorus is, so I suppose that's a good start... fair comment about the tune not "taking off" - any suggestions?
 
Ditch the tremelo...or reduce the depth.

Is that a fretless bass?? The intonation is off a lot...or it isn't tuned up proper-like...sharp.

That's all!
 
Ditch the tremelo...or reduce the depth.
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Don't think I'll ditch it - I quite like it, but I will reduce the depth.


Is that a fretless bass?? The intonation is off a lot...or it isn't tuned up proper-like...sharp.
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No, its not a fretless... & I have tuned it - proper like - with one of the electronic tuner thingies :D... but you're right, I noticed the intonation was a bit dodgy (not "a lot" though - a few cents off - I checked it in v-vocal) & I was wondering if it was noticeable to others, particularly when I'm playing the main 3 note riff in the higher octave.

Thanks for the listen & the comments.
 
Yeah...the opening, especially, the diff in pitch between the keys and bass is pretty bad. Sometimes bass is hard to tune with a tune-o-meter. New strings make it easier....but sometimes ears can split hairs better....especially if the bass isn't intoning right, up the fretboard.
 
Keys?... There're no keys at all on this - The high-pitched tones at the beginning are natural harmonics played on the guitar... possibly complicating the tuning discepancies further...
 
First of all I liked the song in general. ( I got a riders on the storm flash) I agree on the tuning issues early on. I did notice some sounds getting cut off abruptly. Instead of the harmonic melody coming in again, play a little creepy mood setting lick there. Just getting rid of the natural harmonic stuff and playing a cool guitar moody effect would do wonders.
 
Thanks! Great suggestions... still a lot of work to do on this one. I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
 
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