Tear me a new A**

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Rokket

Rokket

Trailing Behind Again
I have a song in it's final stages, so I need some critiques. I played everything as usual, and sang all voices. I have a friend coming over and in a few days, he is going to sing this for me, so my lead vocal is a scratch track. don't mind that.

I got my new Yamaha MG10/2 about two weeks ago and I am still getting used to it. Anyway, tell me what needs fixed. I have been fucking with this to the point of ear fatigue and I have listened too much to be objective anymore.

Don't be nice either, I need a swift kick in the ass...


Jake?

Without You
 
Oh, yeah... I know about the damn drums. I can't do much about that right now...

It's my keyboard...



Anyone want to replace that sorry ass solo for me?
 
Heh, that'll teach me to post when everyone should be asleep...
 
It sounds alright. I think the guitar tone is kinda weak and the bass needs a bit more umph too. The vocals in the chorus sound a bit weird too. Those drums are very.. keyboard. :)

Definitely a decent rock song. Simple, but it works.

I'd attempt a solo for you.. but my guitar neck is cracked right now. :(
 
geet73 said:
It sounds alright. I think the guitar tone is kinda weak and the bass needs a bit more umph too. The vocals in the chorus sound a bit weird too. Those drums are very.. keyboard. :)

Definitely a decent rock song. Simple, but it works.

I'd attempt a solo for you.. but my guitar neck is cracked right now. :(
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What would you do with the guitar tone? I can give the bass more umph...
 
Liked the song Rokket. How come your scratch vocals sound better than my keepers?

Anyway, mix sounds good, and the song itself flows together very smoothly. Bass was a little in the background. I guess that is the only thing I feel could be fixed. I understand about the drums. But they fit as well as can be expected.

Cool, and good luck with it.
Ed
 
Dogman said:
Liked the song Rokket. How come your scratch vocals sound better than my keepers?

Anyway, mix sounds good, and the song itself flows together very smoothly. Bass was a little in the background. I guess that is the only thing I feel could be fixed. I understand about the drums. But they fit as well as can be expected.

Cool, and good luck with it.
Ed
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I only put a quick vocal on there for the guy who is going to sing it to follow. He sang it for me once months ago before I had any real equipment, and I rewrote the lyrics since then. He's got a better range than I do. Thanks for the listen. I will fix the bass...
 
that's such a weird effect on the vocal. I think too much reverb unless you're going for that, which it kind of fits once the thing kicks in.
 
I'll try a solo if you can take the one that's on there out of it.
 
Nice track, I think the vocals could do with a bit of a boost especially in the chorus, only very slightly, i just had a bit of trouble hearing them clearly at times. Apart from that, all sounds ok, the drums sound ok, apart from, what i guess is the cymbals, they sound very electronic. Maybe add a bit more sustain on them to give them more of a ring?

A decent track, enjoyed it :)
 
Yeah, nice stuff, definitely agree with tifstorey's comments. Vocal too buried, also there is some booming on the vox in the early part - too much proximity effect?. I like the vocal sound though. Bass is a bit muddy, I suspect it would sound uncontrolled on a true full range system.
 
Garry Sharp said:
Yeah, nice stuff, definitely agree with tifstorey's comments. Vocal too buried, also there is some booming on the vox in the early part - too much proximity effect?. I like the vocal sound though. Bass is a bit muddy, I suspect it would sound uncontrolled on a true full range system.
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Hey, thanks for the listen, all of you. So, I can fix the bass, that's no problem. The vocal was proximity, as I just grabbed my $20 mic and plugged it DI into my MR-8 and threw the vocal on there as an afterthought. I can record that again easily enough. Thanks again!
 
Oh, and the vocal will be redone by my friend (today, I think) who has a much better range than I do... This song should sparkle by then.
 
jake-owa said:
I can't seem to stream off soundclit this morning.
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They seem to be offline for maintenance. I'll leave it up so that you can get a chance to work your magic for me, Jake.
 
grn said:
I'll try a solo if you can take the one that's on there out of it.
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Soundclick seems to be working again. I will put up a version without my lead in a little bit. I am retracking the lead vocal right now...
 
Oh, crap, it's down again. I hate them. I am going to look for another host....

Hey Geet?
 
The vocal is WIDE and lumpy and it's eating everything! It sounds like it's in a can.
For as loud as the vocal is I can't hear a thing you're saying. The vocal is way out of tune in MANY spots. I would redo IN TUNE and a bit further from the mic and eq out the bottom 250 hz.

The lead is pathetic and dwaddling. Oh god, stop it...it's horrible.

The song is boring as hell and I can't be sure but I think you're saying I love you so much I adore you....it's really bad.

Scrap the song and try another. Seriously, it's that bad.



You asked, I am not exaggerating, all truth.
 
jake-owa said:
The vocal is WIDE and lumpy and it's eating everything! It sounds like it's in a can.
For as loud as the vocal is I can't hear a thing you're saying. The vocal is way out of tune in MANY spots. I would redo IN TUNE and a bit further from the mic and eq out the bottom 250 hz.

The lead is pathetic and dwaddling. Oh god, stop it...it's horrible.

The song is boring as hell and I can't be sure but I think you're saying I love you so much I adore you....it's really bad.

Scrap the song and try another. Seriously, it's that bad.



You asked, I am not exaggerating, all truth.
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Thanks. I am not much of a lead guitarist, so I was asking for help there. I guess I will rewrite. It was for my wife, however....
 
Its not bad, maybe you could space the choral voices so they'll be a little clearer. And a little reverb on the chorus The guitar... ah, well, if I could figure out how to make a guitar sound right, my songs might sound better. Everything sounded 'flat'. Bring the guitar to center a bit more, its like there's a hole in the middle.
 
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