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hi guys

wrote this on one of them get a grip days
what d'you think


©2003
(male or female vocal)
Step Aside
(V1)
I’ve had time to change my mind on life and what it means
I’ve come to see what life can be if going with my dreams
I understand that I’ve been blind not looking where I should
But now I see what’s best for me is stepping out this mud
(V2)
I do believe that to achieve I first must take account
Of years gone by on wasted time and what did it amount
It’s time for me to wake and see that life’s got more to give
Co’s I’ve had time to see from blind and change my life to live
(chorus)
I found love in my soul and a fire in my heart and a will to want to win
Gonna feel the pain from whence it came and take it on the chin
When the bad times come I’ll never run and I’ll never turn my back
On the road ahead where I make my bed and the future wont be black
(V3)
Its time for me to count to three and face the worst head on
To take my place in this rat race looking after number one
I’m so sick to death of tears and sweat gonna make my life complete
Cos I’ve had time to see from blind and finally find my feet.
(chorus)
I found love in my soul and a fire in my heart and a will to want to win
Gonna feel the pain from whence it came and take it on the chin
When the bad times come I’ll never run and I’ll never turn my back
On the road ahead where I make my bed and the future wont be black

I found love in my soul and a fire in my heart and a will to want to win
Gonna feel the pain from whence it came and take it on the chin
When the bad times come I’ll never run and I’ll never turn my back
On the road ahead where I make my bed and the future wont be black
 
I read this over 3 times TRYING to find something that I didn't like about it. I honestly couldn't. Third verse is excellent. If I HAD to change anything, it would be the first line of the Chorus. There's nothing wrong with it, it's just not as good as the rest of the song. Great job, I'd love to hear this if you record it!
 
hi jeff
thanx for your comments really generous you said you would like to hear a recording of this. the only one i have is of myself singing the vocal i have put to it,it may not sound very good as i am not a singer nor do i play any instrument but you will get the idea. to listen to this and others i have written follow the link thanx again for your comments hope you like it.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/7/tobylightmusic.htm more url..
 
I like it.
I'm getting a female vocalist in my studio next tuesday and are striving to get a song ready for her (rehearsal). I have a melody pretty much clear. If it's ok by you I can try to write your lyrics into the melody/tune.
The result won't be posted here as it's gonna be sendt to a publishing company.
In case I get a contract on it I will put you up in credits for the lyrics, and you will get payed royalties in the long run.
The needleeye to get a contract on it is small, but it might slip through. I dont know.
What you think.
 
I've tested the lyrics up against the tune I wrote and it might sound terrific!
It needs some rewriting though in the verses to fit totally.
And I'm also planning on a more recognizable refrain/chorus with more repeats and shorter sentences.
Probably you will answer my posts when you read them.
My email is emusicATemakerDOTno
replace AT with @
replace DO with .
 
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Sorry - disregard. After all it doesn't fit in too well.
I might be able to give it a shot later on to a different tune though.
 
Here's a really predantic grammatical comment (I'm not trying to be snide): whence means from where, so to say from whence is redundant.

Carry on :)
 
mook said:
Here's a really predantic grammatical comment (I'm not trying to be snide): whence means from where, so to say from whence is redundant.

Carry on :)
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erm - I think you mean "pedantic" right? :P
 
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