Should this song start a cd?

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The disk would just be to hand out around here. We planned on putting this as Track 1. I should warn you about a few things but I don't want to put anything into your head. Thanks.

Pixilated
 
Interesting song. I like the lyrics a lot, they're very creative.
This is a personal stylistic preference, but I would replace the disco rhythm section with something more organic, less computer-generated. The guitar seems to tug it in a rock direction, but the "beat" pulls it towards a disco sound.
Good vocal sound, good guitar tone, good songwriting.
 
I sorta like how the song pulls in 2 different directions but I can see how it might sound off. Thanks.
 
"I sorta like how the song pulls in 2 different directions but I can see how it might sound off. Thanks."

If that's what you're trying to create, then go for it. If you create what YOU want to hear, people will like it because it's original and shows how you reprocess your musical influences.
Keep up the good work. :)
 
It sets somewhat tech-y tone but is a little slow. It will set a slow tone for the whole CD.... or at least the expectation. You'll notice most bands will put their fastest, most energetic songs as number 1 'coz that kicks things off and sets the energy. Most #1 songs don't tend to the best hits, although this trend has been changed quite a bit lately with newer pop-generation artists such as Hilary Duff, etc....
 
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Can't really comment on the mix( listening through headphones after a mackie roasted) but, I think it is creative and kinda catchy!!!
 
audiogirl said:
Listening again, the break would sound sweet with some drums behind it, maybe that's all it would need.. just to keep things going...
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Strange that you should mention that. Today was the first time I craved a beat behind that part of the song (and it's been around for a year). I dismissed the idea because of the continuous beat throughout, thinking that a complete break from precussion is a relief. But now... I dunno. Thanks for being so on top of it. One question, though- Overall, does the break work or does it seem awkward?
 
audiogirl said:
If it isn't ridiculously complicated, what are you mainly using for those synth sounds, the dirty ones?
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Reason and Moog Standalone (Arturia) plus junk.
 
Very marketable and catchy. With a knowledgable producer behind this, it has the potential to be very popular. It's got that catchiness that music today lacks. It infects you like a hit song.
 
I like the lyrics/vocals...when the guitar comes in kinda reminds me of New Order a bit.For some reason I see this song a bit deeper in a track order...its definitely a tone setter and I dig it...I just think it would work better after a overall vibe was set, rather than the lead off song.Just my .02 for what its worth .
Nice work!
 
All I'd do is dirty that New Order/Joy Division bass tone just a tad.
the rest is RIGHT.
 
I reckon Pixilated is your strongest and i'd agree with it being the opener. Otherwise the order in which there in is good. I like Bookstore but it feels more of a good idea than a complete song. What about dropping it moving Wait up to third and bringing back Inventory for forth spot?
 
fasterthanu said:
I reckon Pixilated is your strongest and i'd agree with it being the opener. Otherwise the order in which there in is good. I like Bookstore but it feels more of a good idea than a complete song. What about dropping it moving Wait up to third and bringing back Inventory for forth spot?
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Interesting idea, but Inventory isn't close enough to completion. That ones too important to us to let it flop at the end like it does now. Although it's short and quirky, Bookstore must stay. I like the way you think, though.
 
Hey, haven't read anything else in this thread, just typing as I'm as I'm listening... what kind of Cd will this be? I really like the vox and the shadowing synth, then the same guitar part afterwards... all together this gives a mysterious feel. The beat is cool, but again if you're if you are using a real rock drum in songs after this I'd say adjust it or build it up to that, but if you're working with experimental music and beats the rest of the way, very cool. I like the random feel of the track at times, but still catchy too, it's a good start to a CD imo. There's a cool slower mood here, if you're not planning on repeating this with the following songs I'd say the song is too long. Otherwise, cool. Overall, the song and mood is cool, I dug it ;)
 
WHy is it all panned to the left? Take it howerever you want but this is the perfect trendy pop tune that every radio station begs for.

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haha sorry my right speakers got disconnected :o
 
wow... trendy... can't wait to talk to jeremy about that description. no offense taken. If anyone considers that trendy, we might be on to something. Thanks!
 
Audiogirl-Glad you posted again. I hope you will keep me updated as to when the song becomes so annoying you don't listen anymore. As you might imagine, that's an important aspect.
As for the vocals, we're roughly 1/2 and 1/2- jeremy (him), benji (me). It's been primarily email swapping for a while (gas is still high!), but we're really hoping to score some studio time and put something into motion soon.
 
audiogirl said:
I hope I'm mishearing the "big tennis shoes" lyric, lol.... "and reverb in your so called truth" and "smart blur try to edit undo" (to a lesser extent) are much much much better than "brought to me by big tennis shoes".
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Jeremy wrote and sings that but it's "beer, tennis shoes, and chains too". Not sure what he means exactly, but I've worked with him for a LONG time and I know it means something relevant (if only to him).
As for the guitar eargasm- a great idea, and I can hear it. Might see if I can pull it off.
 
A VERY unique song, very cool! Nice job mixing up machine, grunge, and tech sounds. I can totally see this in a film soundtrack...
 
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