Say Goodnight

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This is more of a personal song, but somebody out there may like it anyway. It's a "goodnight" song I wrote for my daughters called, strangely enough: Say Goodnight.

It's just supposed to be a father singing goodnight to his daughter, so I wanted to keep it simple. But the chorus needed something so I put in some harmony parts. I don't care for the way my voice sounds on this particular song. The harmonies are smooth if not ambitious.

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/?aid=1436/singles

It includes every trite goodnight line known to songwriting :D

Tell me what you think...
 
Ahhhhhhhh...

I love tender honesty like this. It really shows in your playing and singing. It does sound like you're not comfortable with the range on the lead vox, it's pitchy in a few spots and tight throated in some others, but pleasing just the same. The harmonies are indeed smooth, and they leaven the sound nicely.

How about a nice counterpoint cello part... hmmmmm... Yeah, that would tie it together nicely.... :D

Pretty piece!
 
good harmonies.........nice song...it's great for what it is....you don't want to add too much instrumentation to a bedtime song......good job
 
Very clean recording...A nice lullaby :)

I thought the vocal could actually come up a little bit in the mix. Some of the words are a bit hard to make out. I really like the harmony in this.

Really has a James Taylor'ish sound to it.

Very nice!
 
great guitar sound....great chord change.."where only you can go"...harmonies....sweet...man you have a high voice as is but did i just hear you go falseto??.....:D ...yeah i agree this doesnt need much more than what you have here......nice little monster verse there......man i have all this to look forward as my is wife due last of this month with our first child..."luckiest guy in the world is yer dad"....great line.....hmmm....i record alll acoustic and then a matter of days..later and this.....coincidence?...i thnk not!:D



really this is asweet song..what a lucky kid you have..

jamal
 
Hey 3M,
How do you critique a song that a guy writes for his little girl man? This is very nice. ....nice melody and guits. ....just listening makes me wanna take a nice nappy with a smile on my face:) Nice stuff for an abviously happy little girl.

.....great work 3M,


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this is some falceto work ther dude ... :) ... the guitar rithm didn't fit the melody rithm at times or something ... but very nice song ... harmonies defenetly are great touch ... bridge needs'em too IMHO
 
Very nice sentiment. Anyone with a daughter of their own can relate to this I'm sure. It brought back some fond memories for me. When my daughter was little, we used to lay in her bed every night and read those Doctor Seuss books over and over till we knew them all by heart. I wouldn't trade that for anything, not even a new Les Paul.

Oh yeah, bring up the vocals a little bit.


Twist
 
Really Nice 3M

Great Acoustic sound and beautiful singing!

Great Job !!!
 
Llarion - I originally sang the song without falsetto the whole way through. The tone on my voice was awful. Last night I just tried a combination of almost whispering and falsetto to get a softer tone. You heard a couple of points where I lurched back into the "tense throat" method. Additionally there were so many switches in and out of falsetto that made it hard for all the notes to hit just right. I probably should go back and get a better take.

powerderfinger - thanks for the nice words. I agree - the simpler the better. I was considering harmony parts that followed the melody line instead of the chord progression. But I felt that would be "too busy."

boydrj - it's weird, the mixdown to .wav seemed to bring the vox down. It was worse after the first mixdown. I went back and brought them up a bit. There are a few words at the begining of phrases that are pretty quiet.

jamal - first let me give you an early contrats on the baby. Parenthood is a real trip. Like other things in life - it's meant to enjoy. So enjoy your baby - and remember they grow up fast, so don't miss anything along the way. Yeah I'm doing falsetto. I can sing it straight, and in fact I did in the first takes. But the tone on my voice was bad - worse than it is here. I'm going to try to go back and get a better lead vocal. It's just hard switching in and out of falsetto like 20 times in a song and hit all the notes just perfect. Thanks for the lyrical comments. On the acoustic, yeah I gotta confess... I want to be just like you when I grow up :D. Seriously, I wrote the music years ago, and the lyrics a month or two ago. Something like this should obviously be done on an acoustic.

G-man - thank you much for the listen and compliments. I see you have a song up. I swear I will try to get to it tomorrow morning. I hope my wussy modem can handle the size. Cross your fingers.

fed - thank you man. If I retrack the lead vox, I'll try to hit those spots (I know which ones you're talking about). I thought about harmonies on the bridge, but I didn't even try any. Maybe I should.

twist - I too will always have cherished memories of the girls growing up. I hoped there would be some fathers out there who would relate. Thank you.
 
hey neighbor!

Sounds very nice... nice acoustic tone.. clean

Your vocals sound good.... Give a listen to my vox :eek: scary :)

Nice song!
 
twist said:
It brought back some fond memories for me. When my daughter was little, we used to lay in her bed every night and read those Doctor Seuss books over and over till we knew them all by heart.


Oh yeah, bring up the vocals a little bit.


Twist
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One fish,
Two fish,
Red fish,
Blue fish...

I agree with both of Twist's statements. Very, very nice.

(bring vox up a tad)

Thanks,
Chris
 
awwwww....... that chorus with the harmonies really got me. That was great. As has already been stated, the vocals were pretty low.

The guitar sounded good. I really liked the blend of the chorus vocals with the guitar. It really fit well. The verse and bridge parts seemed a tad bit busy and almost felt comptetitive with the vocals. Maybe simplify the picking. That is something I know I have a huge problem with at times being primarily a fingerstyle player.

There is so much deja vu on this board... I"ve got a song I wrote that I'm dedicating to my step-daughters. I've also got a lullaby song I wrote for my nephews I'm about to post. And I just found out the wife is expecting my first!!! whew!!! Anywho, thanks for sharing this tune.
 
Beautiful song 3M. Pleasant little girl dreams. As others, I wish the vocals were just a bit more front. Ah, but it almost brings tears to my eyes just as it is. This is really cool man, your daughters are lucky indeed. :D
 
very nice!

this is the best thing i've heard from you yet mmm!

I really like the guitar recording and the singing is great. I think you recorded all of your best qualities on this. The other recordings were really being cluttered with too much imo. Very good singing, especially the bgv's! Man, keep with this style, acoustic and vocals.

You might think about rearranging some of your other tunes this way and see what happens! Or you might just leave them like they are and ignore my 'trite' request.
 
So how'd I go from 4 stars down to 3? Gentlemen, you've bummed my Friday. Oh who cares???

jcmm - thank you for your time and comments. I appreciate it.

Sam - thanks for the compliments. I knew you'd like it. I know how fond you are of "little nite nite songs." Was it you that brought down my star rating? :) Don't make me kick your ass. Seriously, I always appreicate your comments and time.

JMarcomb - good to hear from you! Thank you for the comments. I'm going to try for a better take on the lead vox. I'm sorta happy with 'em, but I know I can do better. I hope to have another version posted by the weekend. Good hearing from a neighbor. You're in Libertyville I seem to remember right? I'm in Vernon Hills - spitting distance.

Mr. Harris - I've read that book many times. I know there are times when reading to the kids before bed, that I'm so tired myself, those Dr. Seuss rhymes just completely numb your brain. I'm going to fix, and raise the vocals. Thank you much, friend.

JR#97 - Great that you liked it. On the "things compete" thing... There are those two sections with the abrupt chords. I'm going to try to smooth those over better with vocals - but I don't think I'm going to be able to completely address that. The guitar was a loaner, so what's there is staying there. Thanks.

Mr. Air Pressure Guage (aka Barometer) - I'll bring up the vox. It seems to be a consensus that they need to be raised. Thanks for your comments.

Eric - glad you liked it. Change styles? Nah - I'd rather get better with what I was doing. This was a nice change up, but it's not what I want to do. I'll tell you though - I just bought a new amp (obviously not employed on this song) that I'm hoping will help my sound. There's been a certain "brittleness" to my other stuff that I'm trying to address. I'm going to sell my "Walmart amp" on eBay. Pay attention to my next one to see if you notice. Also got an Oktava condenser mic. It's used on the vocals on this one. Thanks for the listen.
 
not that it realy matters but here are some more stars for you ... :) I have a litle girl so this one hits home ... I might have to learn it ...
 
ok... what is that riff you do on and after "they don't have a chance " I can't figure it out it starts with something diminished and then there are two "mumbled" frases/chords that I can't seem to figure out ... maybe I should of PMed you ... actualy I just wanted to see if I can sing that high ... :D and got into it ...
 
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