redneck protest song

[jimistone]

I have been toying around with a redneck protest song....cause its pissed me off that the liberals have caused the Old Miss college mascot "Cornel Reb" to be done away with. (i don't know the correct spelling of "cornel" as you can see). Now they are going after the team name "rebels".......assholes.

its uptempo traditional country and goes like this here:

1st
Theres a new invasion,
down here in Dixieland,
by folks who want to change the things that they don't understand.
The stars and bars are gone,
and you won't see "Cornel Reb" no more,
we've lost several battles,
but this time we won't loose the war.

(chorus)
Cause we're sons of sons of rebel sons,
who rebel against the things,
that rob our southern heritage,
till none of it remains.
If you don't love us, leave us,
and be...
gone with the wind!
Its time down here in Dixie,
for the south to rise again.

2nd
class action lawyers leed the charge,
and they suckin' on our paychecks.
They want to take away our guns.
Which freedom will be next?
They ought to be tarred and feathered,
and loaded up in trucks,
and shipped to New York city.
Cause man down here we've had enough.

(chorus)

3rd
Political correctness,
is a cancer we don't need.
Its grown and taken over every aspect of our speech.
They've banned the 10 comandments,
and prayer in all our schools,
and now they teach our little girls about a womans right to choose.

(chorus)
one bar of "Dixie" for the ending

I know this song is very politically incorrect
but i had fun writing it and it does some up alot of the sentiment here in the deep south.

ok guys, give me some input and pick it apart.

 

[bdbdbuck]

My .02...there aint much to pick apart. I can just hear ol Charlie Daniels howlin this one out now! The chorus really grabs me. You go on with your bad self man! Remember.... it takes a village to raise an idiot!


bd

 

[terocious]

Hi jimistone,
I am with bdbdbuck that there aint much to pick apart here but after several reads I came up with two totally nitpicky things.

"and you won't see "Cornel Reb" no more" - Maybe consider changing Won't to Can't. My reason for this suggestion is won't implies finality. Never again, thats it, You have seen him for the last time while can't (to me) implies that you are not allowed to see him or someone is keeping you from seeing him. There is a rule against seeing him and rules were made to be broken by rebels. Also the C in can't and Cornel might flow nicely together in singing. (I don't know in saying it over and over won't and can't sound just as good to me.)

The second thing comes just after my favorite line in the chorus-
"Cause we're sons of sons of rebel sons" (I love the ring and history of that) and then comes "who rebel against the things" The next line starts with "That" so you end up coming off the t in "against" and then having three "th" words in a row which makes for some tricky tounge work. You could replace "the" with "all" to avoid this. Also all implies we rebel against EVERYTHING that would rob us...

Told you they were nitpicky. If you are not careful you could have a hit on your hands.

"Live Free or Die!"


He, He, takes a villiage...

 

[jimistone]

thanks for the input guys....those are good suggestions.

i was thinking of changing the 1st line in the chorus to "Rebel sons and daughters"

but maybe "sons of sons of rebel sons" is better

 

[mikeh]

I think good songs should tell a story. You not only tell a story, you incorporate a topical issue with historic significance.

I think it's a good job!! Like any song, I suspect some re-writes may help smooth out what may be rough edges on the phrasing (although not knowing the melody line makes that difficult to really judge).

I think "son of sons of rebel sons" is a great line, it would be a shame if you lost it.

Although terocious may have a point on the can't vs. won't - I actually think won't flows better (a fast can't may sound like can) and I also think "won't...no more" provides a hint at an internal rhyme (I'm a fan of internal rhymes).