legionserial
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No lyrics as yet. Please critique.
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Greg_L
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Pretty cool. Not my style so I can't comment on the structure or arrangement too much. I can say though that the intro and outro "noise" is too long unless you're gonna have something going on on top of it. The music seems repetitive with no vocals, but I think having vocals will take care of that. The mix sounds very good overall. I'm not crazy about that snare sound. It sounds kind of dull. Is it possible to swap in a different sample without affecting the programming? I like the guitars a lot. I'd personally like to hear maybe some lead style accents somewhere in there. Not full on wanking solos, but just accent stuff. The bass is really good but could use a slight volume bump or more definition/less low mud.
Overall a very full and big sounding mix. Good job.
Overall a very full and big sounding mix. Good job.
rayc
retroreprobate
The intro is double the length I'd bare with before pressing fast forward. 15 sec is how long the guitar bits mix with the concrete stuff & that's about my limit unless I'm expecting something.
The outro sounds like you've been listening to Fripp & Eno's No Pussyfooting or even Evening Star - it's nice but there's no development within it so it becomes just a loop after a while.
The music in between shows promise.
It does need a melody obviously. Some bass definition'd be nice too.
Nice recording job!
The outro sounds like you've been listening to Fripp & Eno's No Pussyfooting or even Evening Star - it's nice but there's no development within it so it becomes just a loop after a while.
The music in between shows promise.
It does need a melody obviously. Some bass definition'd be nice too.
Nice recording job!
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acattoir
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I dig it! A live drummer might be a nice alternative. The intro and outro are very interesting creations and I didn't mind the length of them. Maybe a shorter version for the radio.
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legionserial
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The outro is just the verse riff reversed and looped. It was supposed to have some drum loop start and then segue into some kind of dance tune but by the time I came to mix it I had some distaste for dance music and threw it out. I'm pretty sure it could do with shortening in fact every time I go back to it I shortened it.
(NB: all the stuff I've been posting is from about a year ago. I got burnout from spending all my time on the same 11 or 12 tunes and went on hiatus..which just seemed to get longer and longer. Now I'm going back to it with fresh ears I figure getting a few opinions first couldn't hurt).
This tune is actually a rerecording of a tune I made in Acid years and years ago. Me and a few friends used to joke about how the sample was my theme tune, and we threw it into a whole bunch of stuff for a giggle.
I'm happy with the intro. Not to everyone's taste but it's not neccessarily for everyone else. That stays as it is. What can I say...I've always been a fan of wierd atmospheric noise.
The snare does sound deadish, but with my limited mixing capabilities it was a tradeoff between that and sticking out over the mix too much, so it's likely more my EQing than the sample. Interestingly the drums are the same samples I use on all the other music I've posted. I'm pretty sure it would be no hassle to throw another snare into the sampler and drag all the snare hits to that on the drum map. I'll have a look when I get the chance.
(NB: all the stuff I've been posting is from about a year ago. I got burnout from spending all my time on the same 11 or 12 tunes and went on hiatus..which just seemed to get longer and longer. Now I'm going back to it with fresh ears I figure getting a few opinions first couldn't hurt).
This tune is actually a rerecording of a tune I made in Acid years and years ago. Me and a few friends used to joke about how the sample was my theme tune, and we threw it into a whole bunch of stuff for a giggle.
I'm happy with the intro. Not to everyone's taste but it's not neccessarily for everyone else. That stays as it is. What can I say...I've always been a fan of wierd atmospheric noise.
The snare does sound deadish, but with my limited mixing capabilities it was a tradeoff between that and sticking out over the mix too much, so it's likely more my EQing than the sample. Interestingly the drums are the same samples I use on all the other music I've posted. I'm pretty sure it would be no hassle to throw another snare into the sampler and drag all the snare hits to that on the drum map. I'll have a look when I get the chance.