jlewis
attic boy
Sounds good, I like the little guitar-bass battle toward the end. I feel like I want someone doing back-up vocals though.
jeffmaher
New member
ZZ Top!! Good approximation of their formula...the octave splits , slappy reverb, guitar tone, and everything else. My only nit is that the lead guitar fills aren't loud enough....listening low, or on 11. Everything else is rockin'. Love it.
It don't need anything else...or very little... to finish. It works!
It don't need anything else...or very little... to finish. It works!
Chili
Site Moderator
Yeah-ah, sounds good. Not sure what else you'd want to do with it. Seems pretty complete.
So, I guess if I had to nit on anything, it would be the lyrics in the chorus. The verses are great with images, innuendos, word play, etc.. the chorus is very plain compared to the verses. But, that's the only nit I can come up with... so, the song is rock solid.
cheers,
So, I guess if I had to nit on anything, it would be the lyrics in the chorus. The verses are great with images, innuendos, word play, etc.. the chorus is very plain compared to the verses. But, that's the only nit I can come up with... so, the song is rock solid.
cheers,
studioplayer
Forever learning
Rami!! Sounds awesome. Man your mixes are super clear. 
Shit man. You don't need any advice. You know exactly what your doing. 
Not much to suggest but I like the lead guitar in the background at :46 to 1:08 and 1:30 to 1:50. It's cool in the background but wouldn't mind hearing a little bit more up front (but still in the back). Just personal taste. 
It's a pretty choppy, stop & start tune. Just wondering if it's possible to smooth things out a bit more from about 2:40 to 3:02. You do have lead in there but the background and lead are still pretty choppy. Might change it up a bit if you could do some kind of smooth trippy lead and smooth rhythm. If you get what I mean? 
Then again I may be just talking out of my hat. Just looking for something to suggest on an otherwise pretty cool tune. You do keep with your style. Nice one bro!!
Dave
Shit man. You don't need any advice. You know exactly what your doing. Not much to suggest but I like the lead guitar in the background at :46 to 1:08 and 1:30 to 1:50. It's cool in the background but wouldn't mind hearing a little bit more up front (but still in the back). Just personal taste. It's a pretty choppy, stop & start tune. Just wondering if it's possible to smooth things out a bit more from about 2:40 to 3:02. You do have lead in there but the background and lead are still pretty choppy. Might change it up a bit if you could do some kind of smooth trippy lead and smooth rhythm. If you get what I mean? Then again I may be just talking out of my hat. Just looking for something to suggest on an otherwise pretty cool tune. You do keep with your style. Nice one bro!! Dave
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RAMI
Guest
Hey guys,
Thanx for the listen. So, the different guitar parts that a couple of you said should come up happen to be all the same track. So, I'll bring that track up.
Jlewis: You may be right about the back vocals. Most of my tunes have backs, but in this tune, besides the very last line of the tune, I didn't think it needed it. Thanx for commenting, I'll keep that in mind.
Jeff: ZZ Top never even crossed my mind. Funny how that happens, when others hear something in your music that you had no intention of doing. Thanx a lot for the comments and advice.
ChiliThanx man. I know what you're saying about the lyrics. I wanted a one word title and simple chorus after the blabbering in the verses.
StudioPlayerThanx for the listen, brothah. I'll bring that guitar up.
Thanx for the listen. So, the different guitar parts that a couple of you said should come up happen to be all the same track. So, I'll bring that track up.
Jlewis: You may be right about the back vocals. Most of my tunes have backs, but in this tune, besides the very last line of the tune, I didn't think it needed it. Thanx for commenting, I'll keep that in mind.
Jeff: ZZ Top never even crossed my mind. Funny how that happens, when others hear something in your music that you had no intention of doing. Thanx a lot for the comments and advice.
ChiliThanx man. I know what you're saying about the lyrics. I wanted a one word title and simple chorus after the blabbering in the verses.
StudioPlayerThanx for the listen, brothah. I'll bring that guitar up.
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rnelson
Member
Sounds great man!
One thing I'd do differently, and it's really just personal taste, but I'd make the drums bigger and dirtier. Especially the kick. The kick sound you have is nice and tight, but it sounds a little too small for me. Again, it's a matter of what YOU want out of the song, so if you love your tight drums, then stick with 'em.
One thing I'd do differently, and it's really just personal taste, but I'd make the drums bigger and dirtier. Especially the kick. The kick sound you have is nice and tight, but it sounds a little too small for me. Again, it's a matter of what YOU want out of the song, so if you love your tight drums, then stick with 'em.
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RAMI
Guest
Hey Melson. Thanx alot for the listen and comments.
Funny you say that about the drums because this tune was the first time I tried putting my drums through some distortion. I ended up not using it because a little bit made it just sound like something weird was going on with the drums, and a lot made it too distracting. Then, I tried putting distortion on them only for the middle break, but it was too predictable, like something from every 80's rap tune. But I can definitely hear what you're saying about the drums needing "something".
FoulPhil
Well-known member
You rock dude! I think it's a great tune with a great sound. DIGGIN IT BROTHA 
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RAMI
Guest
You rock dude! I think it's a great tune with a great sound. DIGGIN IT BROTHA
Thanx a lot, Foul.
rayc
retroreprobate
Excellent piece of work. Great lead!
I like the stop start nature - it's refelcted in the bass line, the drums, the vocals - it's part of the dynamics of the whole package.
I haven't listened to the lyrics yet. I'll come back for round 2 after I do.
So far - so fantastic.
A little more on the lead noodles'd be nice.
I like the stop start nature - it's refelcted in the bass line, the drums, the vocals - it's part of the dynamics of the whole package.
I haven't listened to the lyrics yet. I'll come back for round 2 after I do.
So far - so fantastic.
A little more on the lead noodles'd be nice.
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RAMI
Guest
Thanx a lot, Ray.
If you want to read while listening, here they are. Like most of my lyrics, it's just abstract junk thrown together to, hopefully, not sound too stupid.
Gravity (words and music by RAMI)
In the morning in the light losing pieces of the puzzle in the night
In a bubble in a bind running into trouble running into walls running out of time
So there I was preaching to the choir sipping cheap champagne and drowning in denial
They ran me down set me on fire it's hard to grab the wheel when you are stuck under a tire
Chorus:
Gravity is coming down hard over me
Gravity is coming down hard on me
Break a promise break the rules break a heart don’t break a sweat just play it cool
It's getting crazy it's getting mean it’s getting dark it’s time to kill all the lawyers in their sleep
Chorus:
Gravity is coming down hard over me
Gravity is coming down hard on me
Chorus:
Gravity is coming down hard over me
Gravity is coming down hard over me
Gravity is coming down hard on me
rayc
retroreprobate
Thanks RAMI,
A good set of lines that do fit together well. Each line strikes a chord visually & triggers a bundle more ideas in my scone.
I particulalrly like the way you sang line 2.
Good job mate!
A good set of lines that do fit together well. Each line strikes a chord visually & triggers a bundle more ideas in my scone.
I particulalrly like the way you sang line 2.
Good job mate!
DD83
New member
WoW! This starts like it's gonna be mixed good and hit you hard...then the vocals take precedent. The chorus sounds decent but the leads and muted riffs sound clean and clear but low. I really dug this too. I hope you can get it fixed up cause I'd really like to hear a balanced version. It reminded me of the way the Motley Crue w/John Corabi album was mixed, I liked it, alot. Would you share how you acheived that sound?
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Greg_L
Banned
Sounds good to me. Classic RAMI sound. I have no nits really. Maybe lose that little bit of feedback in the beginning, or let it ring longer with a slower fade out. Love the jam-block.
joeym
New member
Totally groovy Rami!
Arrangement-wise, I really don't feel like anything's missing, maybe a chugging wah rythm in parts of the verse? But really I don't think it needs anythings else. Great quality recording, wonderful sounds.
Joey
Arrangement-wise, I really don't feel like anything's missing, maybe a chugging wah rythm in parts of the verse? But really I don't think it needs anythings else. Great quality recording, wonderful sounds.
Joey
antichef
pornk rock
love it! I like the lack of fill with the early vocals, and the fills in the later one. I also wanted to hear the initial feedback go on longer - that was cool!
CIRO
Eu mesmo
Great song, buddy!
I´d like to find some problems on the mix ,but its not possible ...
Guitars at 03:22 and 03:23 (pan) are amazing!
What I think ... people should learn with you, Rami... your studio moved 4 or 5 times since I started to post here (4 years ago) and your instruments tone still almost the same.
What means... "EARS"
Ciro
I´d like to find some problems on the mix ,but its not possible ...
Guitars at 03:22 and 03:23 (pan) are amazing!
What I think ... people should learn with you, Rami... your studio moved 4 or 5 times since I started to post here (4 years ago) and your instruments tone still almost the same.
What means... "EARS"
Ciro
ido1957
9K Gold Member
Sounds good to my ears Rami. Another solid mix. Nice punchy tune also - I'm diggin' it!
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RAMI
Guest
Thanx a lot for all the help and comments, guys. I re-mixed it with a few changes, as suggested.
Thanx again!
Thanx again!
