Mammon (Count It) - Looking for feedback on composition and mix

[Jeffaklumpen]

I got some Pink Floyd presets for Guitar Rig and this is the result after jamming for a while.

The track is inspired by Pink Floyds "Money".

Disclaimer! The vocals is currently AI. It's how I work since I can sing myself. I Use a combination of both guitar to create the melody and/or my own horrible voice and then change that to AI so I can get a feel of how it'll actually sound with a good singer. It works great as a blueprint to use when getting a singer to actually record it later on. It's still composed by me and no AI will be included in the final result.

Everything except the vocals is 100% non-AI.

I would love some feedback mainly on the composition since vocals will be changed later on, but would also love some thoughts on the mix on the instruments. I want it to sound 70s. Does the track get boring? Does the sound effects of coins, bills and the wall street crowd work or is it to much? Any tips on how I can improve it?

Here's the lyrics:

[VERSE 1]

Another zero, keep 'em coming
Grab every green you can
another handshake, another deal
Doesn't matter who gets burned

Hey Mammon, tell me what I'm worth
My heaven's here on earth
Ain't nothing can't be sold
Trade my soul for a stack of cash

[CHORUS]
COUNT IT!
Count it till your fingers bleed
COUNT IT!
Count it like it's all you need
STACK IT!
Stack it higher watch it grow
STACK IT!
Stack it watch the money flow

[VERSE 2]

The gates of heaven don't take gold
Can't bribe that final door
Another dollar, another dime
Fill my soul with borrowed time

Hey Mammon, tell me what's your price
What will you take from me?
Fat cats watch that dollar sign
Until there's nothing left to count

[CHORUS]
COUNT IT!
Count it till your fingers bleed
COUNT IT!
Count it like it's all you need
STACK IT!
Stack it higher watch it grow
STACK IT!
Stack it watch the money flow

 

[Slouching Raymond]

That was really good. I wouldn't change a thing.

 

[Jeffaklumpen]

That was really good. I wouldn't change a thing.

Thank you kindly!

 

[mark skinner]

Very Impressive production! I think you for sure got the 70's vibe going. I Really liked the guitar work and the chorus sections vocals.
As far as the mix.. the only thing that stood out to me that could use some improvement was the intro synth. Sounded Great but was a little loud when the drums first come in. Enjoyed it .. mark

 

[rob aylestone]

It reminded me of early Alan Parsons. For me personally, vox up a bit and the guitar down in a few sections. I like it.

 

[Jeffaklumpen]

Very Impressive production! I think you for sure got the 70's vibe going. I Really liked the guitar work and the chorus sections vocals.
As far as the mix.. the only thing that stood out to me that could use some improvement was the intro synth. Sounded Great but was a little loud when the drums first come in. Enjoyed it .. mark

Thank you so much! Glad to hear the 70's vibe is working

I'll take a look at the synth in the intro, thanks!

 

[Jeffaklumpen]

It reminded me of early Alan Parsons. For me personally, vox up a bit and the guitar down in a few sections. I like it.

I love Alan Parsons! The vocals will be replaced later on, but I'll take another look at the guitars, thanks!

 

[TalismanRich]

Good song! You could maybe drop the guitar a tad. It competes pretty heavily with the vocals in spots. No way would I think it was boring. You've got good changes. l like the way the instrumental break builds up. Find the right vocalist and you've got a winner!

 

[HumanPlanet]

I like it too, well written lyrics that gets the message across. Nice.

 

[famous beagle]

This was really great. Great groove, great tones and playing overall.

The only thing that struck me was the treatment of the lead guitar. I didn't care for all the delay and panning, etc. IMO, a more direct in-your-face approach would be more effective, but that's just subjective, of course.

Overall, very enjoyable!