I did give you a fair review, you sound like you're attempting to try and emulate the Pixies, and failing. Badly. Also your screaming is very weak.
"and the thing is not mixed yet."
Nor is mine.
"If you are trying to feel better by looking at my writing you are missing the picture."
If someone critiques me I'm happy. If someone attacks me verbally I have a listen to their stuff to see the justification. I feel you are in no position to do so.
My song isn't cheesy, but your lyrics are appalling, you use random sentences the Chilli's would blush at.
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"An open eyed, but narrow mind, seems to make me feel blessed.
All my anger’s left behind; maybe I’m no longer messed.
You’re the one that cured me, my histamines were hurt and hate,
There’s no one else I want to see, waking up with you is fate.
A fucked up view on how to live, a clear blue sky that I don’t own,
I’ve never had a lot to give; a lover’s touch is all I know.
An open door that light shines through, invites me in out of the cold,
After a search there’s only you, I want to love, to have to hold.
When I see the brightest lights, they’re shining from your eyes."
Feel free to critique those. I was 18 when I wrote them and I stand by them to this day.
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I did not mean to offend, I just think enough people with stuff worse than yours will be along to stroke you. That aint what I do...so sorry.
"The bass is not 'intonated' right, look that word up and learn how to do it. "
I know how what intonated means, and how to sort the intonation on a guitar I've been playing, self taught guitar, drums, bass and vocals for 5 years now, the intonation isn't off at all, if you knew anything about fretless basses you'd know someone who doesn't play them - IE Me. Will have difficulty with the microtones available by not having your finger on the EXACT spot on the fret.
"The tone is muddy and EVERYWHERE. I call that outta control."
That I don't doubt, I am relatively new to mixing, hence coming onto here to get some tips and advice, not get some bloke rip apart the style of music I love. You're entitled to your own opinion, you just have to learn that it's wrong.
"I never said you were outta tune in all the vocals, when I typed that there was a very bad spot, I bet you already know where it is."
Yes I do. I don't believe in using auto-tune and I don't believe in multiple takes IF I can help it. If a singer hits a duff note with enough emotion what does it matter? Listen to Johny Cash at Folsom Prison to understand what I'm getting at. I'm not a bad singer but let's be honest I'm no Jeff Buckley.
The compression I used really has made me sound weird. It doesn't sound like me what so ever.
"The guitar playing is ambiguous and not really planned sounding. I have to make up for my own inabilities all the time in music so I know when I hear it not being pulled off. Your song does not pull it off in my very lonely opinion."
Again, the solo is improvised, but I feel it works. I had to take it down in the mix and plaster it in effects simply because of the disgusting tone I recorded with. At the time Nirvana style distortion seemed like a great solo sound. With hindsight, a bluesy solo would have been a better option. Other than that the guitars are played how they were written. Nicely.
"Get a life, quit freaking out, it's not like I said your kid was ugly."
Again, I'd expect to see justification, and as I also do part time modelling, I doubt you could back that up
Also, next time you critique someone with your great knowledge actually add something that they can take away and learn from, as opposed to just being pompous and "better than thou".
. Just remember that the pain is weakness leaving your music 