Thanks to reviewers, I appreciate the time. 
Big T, I'm doing a session tomorrow (other song) but will review guitar level; 
Johnny A, will add looking at vocal levels; that is a telecaster (unfortunately not me playing!); 
VHatSteve, we did discuss lip smacks as 'keeping it real' but I agree they may be TOO real and appreciate specifics re: vocals, as well as style comment, and comparative listening-- thanks!; 
MJBphotos, fascinating catch about intent, it started out as a story summary to guide a screenplay development with same title as the song and I'm interested in writing "Snowden: The Musical," so this is certainly a theme for me.  The guy I'm working with calls it quasi-operatic intent.  Appreciate the specifics on vocals; 
TripleM; thanks on the conceptual comment, and will add ?guitar harsh to the review.  
As kind of new commenter I"m perhaps tending to over-thank, but it is really nice to have a place like this one to get review and comments.