please judge this song its my first one. i really wanna be hit with a crit!!!!!

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Lemme say this first: the guitar work is very good here. You also got a very good tone out of the guitars so however you mic'd 'em do that again. The chord structure is very engaging, original, and creative. Me likey.

What I don't like is the way in which the vocals were done. The vocal style and quality works quite well, but it is so low in the mix that I can't hear the lyrics no matter how hard I strain and the guitar comes across as the main instrument so the vocals sound kinda scatalogical and wandering. The vocals just seem sort or ancillary and dissonant.

I'd really like to hear this song if you brought the vox levels up.
 
I thought the guitar in the right channel needed a bit more treble and vol. I agree on the vocals. I'm always a fan of light percussion and wonder how a bit of shaker or a bit of banging would have lifted the sound.

Keep on truckin'
 
i really liked the song, dug the guitar playing alot. I agree with the vocals being a little low, maybe a little more compression to help them sit a little higher. I don't mind the huge panning between the left and right guitars but the right one on my system seems harder to hear than the left. I know when i have that problem i bring the guitars in a bit closer to center, a bit more blended maybe. My opinions could easily be way off im not exactly a pro, just some random thoughts. Totally enjoyed the song, i really hope to hear more or another mix on this one.

Take care

Gary
 
oh goodness!

im chuffed with that guys thanks a lot. im planning on re mixing the song soon. its gonna be a full mix. i know about the vox but its hard to push up the vox when its your own voice!
 
I think everything blended well, and that really makes the song enjoyable to listen to. I think you need to only make small tweaks to have a really great song.

I think you should maybe try and get your guitar to sound a little more natural, and bring some highs out on the vocals. They are getting a bit muffled and cardboardish with the current EQ scheme.
 
Up the vocals. Voice sounds very good.

Guitar good!
Backup vocals ("aaaah's") good!

Something makes me think of Sting. Which is meant as a compliment. It's not necessarily the voice being similar, I guess it's either a little voice and a little style. But Summary: I like the vocals, but I would like to see them louder. The rhythm guitar can be taken down by a db.

Really really nice rhythm and lead guitar work. I would like to hear the lead just a little more prominent.

Man, I would definitely listen to this song again. :)
 
Like the acoustic playing,I agree that a bit of eq on the acoustic would be beneficial...and maybe help give the vocals some space as they are kinda buried...the backing vocal sounds nice also.Cool song.
 
remixed again

ok i keep updating this track on the site so i can keep showing you how im trying to make it better
everytime you give me advice im considering it and learning cool.

just what i hoped from this site.

cheers.
 
here are the lyrics if anyone is interested.

stand off inroads taper down this night
trading their out think bids to never know
they polished the wild denial till it shone from inside
polished the wild denial for a long long time

the stretch line comes again and it will take us down
a trip roped free ride into the next place
and as you draw your breath to start the count down
the made up things depleet too much cant carry on

wasted time trying to contemplate
and get lost in a haze of the things that you dont know
where sketches taking hours scream "more light"
their long awaited freedom falls tonight

the stretch line comes again and it will take us down
a trip roped free ride into the next place
and as you draw your breath to start the count down
the made up things depleet too much cant carry on

stand off inroads taper down this night
trading their out think bids to never know
they polished the wild denial till it shone from inside
polished the wild denial for a long long time

the stretch line comes again and it will take us down
a trip roped free ride into the next place
and as you draw your breath to start the count down
the made up things depleet too much cant carry on
 
Not gonna advise on the recording, just the tune...sorry. The tune is awesome, and I love the mood it creates. Reminds me of....well, never mind. Very progressively, tensively written.
 
oh well im enjoying these comments

thanks to all who have commented ive remixed the tune now i reckon it sounds 100% better.
cheers! :)
 
Guitar...

I dunno if you did this, but I think the guitar tone would be some-what better, atleast brighter, if you use new guitar strings. The tuning also seemed a little out (perhaps the intonation ?).
 
When the song starts with "stand off inroads taper down this night", the timing seems a little weird. It takes a moment to get used to it.

Around 3:20 when it goes "Stand off" after a little interval, that sounds just fine. It stays on time.

Everything else sounds fine to me.
 
im chuffed just wanna say cheers.

Im really worried about my vox thats why its taken me so long to release songs. I find it really hard to let people hear my voice. Id love it if when i get my final tracks recorded someone could take another pop at mixing for me. that would be sweet. Just trying to learn all aspects of recording really get my shit nailed down so i can develop the freedom i need to create the right sound.

excellent!

anth.
 
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