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JerryD

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Hi all,

This is my first song recorded so yes I'm new to all of this.
I wrote this for a girl who sings soft country music to sing.
I basically write songs for other artists. Looks like she didn't
like this one. I'll have to find someone else to sing it.
hmmmm. This is usually not my style of song.

Well anyway I only have two tracks because it was a demo for
her. One track is guitar and vocals and the other track is background keyboard string type stuff.

I guess what I'm looking for is critisism on songwriting, *sound of equipment*, and mixing. Mixing won't be much because there is only two tracks.

Let me know. Thanks for your response.

http://artists2.iuma.com/IUMA/Bands/Jerry_D/
 
Jerry,

nice job...I thought the recording was pretty clean ...the song was nice, as far as melody and lyrics (a few lyrics I would touch up)....Cant see why she passed on this one...very nice tune...
 
Good tune.

Songwriting-wise: how 'bout a nice pause at some point between the title words? "You're the other part... .... .... of me."

Also, you might try varying the melody a bit more. I do the same thing all the time: use the same melody for each verse. Sometimes its nice to break it up a little more.

As you mentioned, the recording is pretty sparse so it is difficult to give feedback on it. I would have liked to hear more body on the guitar, but your voice was full. Given the nature of the demo that's appropriate.

With only 2 tracks I might have recorded just the guitar on one track and the vocals on the other. To give the demo the best chance I'd want to be able to mix the vox and the guitar- maybe compress them individually and add a touch of reverb. A well recorded guitar might give you a fuller sound than the synth.

The sound you've gotten is pretty clean. What are you using to record?

-Chris
 
Thanks for the feedback

Chris,

Thanks for the recommendations.

Equipment? Currently I'm using NT1>Mackie1202VLZPro>Lynxone>Vegas pro>Cooleditpro

Mixing with headphones.

I hope to move to a NTK mic and a decent monitoring system.

Thanks for the advice. I will start recording the Guitar and vocals separate. Thanks again.
 
mixing with heapdphones?

no wonder it sounds so great on my headphones.

You have an awesome voice, and by the way, I think the song is awesome.

SOmetimes it sounds like slow pop that the bsboys would sing.

cool. Keep it up man.

ps. Very nice quality conversion you've got there.
 
Thanks.

CyanJaguar,

Thanks.

Isn't this a cool past-time?

Well for some it is a passion.
 
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