The mix sounds good in the beginning, but then the first tom roll seems high or needs to move from the left inward a bit. The kick is slightly overdriven, but might sound great on a huge subwoofer.
Vocals:
"Forgive me", "Don't want you to think", "It's odd", etc... I think could be lightly doubled. Personally, I think the vocals sound too exposed and raw to pack a punch.
Recording sounds great, I just think it needs a bit more production to make it less of a demo sound and more a finished product. But no offense meant, this is just me being ultra critical; it's a great start. In the style of a RES song.