Original song by Balshazza

  • Thread starter Thread starter Balshazza
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Do you think this song is...

  • Awesome

    Votes: 1 20.0%

  • Great

    Votes: 2 40.0%

  • Good

    Votes: 2 40.0%

  • Yeah alright

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • TURN THAT CRAP OFF!!!

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • Total voters
    5
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Balshazza

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Hey guys can you listen to this original and tell me what you think?

its my first original that iv recorded and just need some pointers for this song and also for some more that il be recording soon.

get it from this site

www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1696&alid=-1

i had to change the site, sorry. Now it will download sweet!


thanks heaps
 
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wow Balshazza that downloaded in about 5 seconds...

Of course you know you can't direct link to geocities, so if anyone else wants to hear Balshazza:

1. open a new browser window (File + New + Window)
2. type the link www.geocities.com/balshazza/run.mp3 into the address bar.
3. hit enter, then save it (you have to download it -- not streamable)

OR

Balshazza could open a page at Waldo's Nowhere Radio. :)

NOW -- on to your song:

Oh, in your face guitar right away. Like the bass tone. Beat sounds SKA-ey (the verse). Ah... cool bridge/chorus. Vocal seems to need something -- some more pitch control? I like the arrangement. Lyrics are cool "what I need right now is for you to help me out in an unselfish way"... The arrangement and composition are nicely dynamic. Song is about the right length. It moves along nicely. Pretty nice.

Don't believe you asked for mix/production comments... so... there ya go.


Chad
 
Thanks participant.

I didnt know you couldnt direct link to geocities, i tested it and it seemed to work for me.

I know im not a very good singer and i think thats what the problem is. I tried to make the singing more full by adding another low vocal track.

I really hate writing lyrics coz its so hard to sit there and write about "something"!!

if you have mixing suggestions that would be really helpful.


peace
 
Well Balshazza, I think the song is pretty good too. Maybe a bit more vocal harmonies would add to the effect in some parts of it.
Also dont be afraid to do a more complex bass line.

keep up the good work.
 
Balshazza

Great song!!
Nice and solid song with a catchy beat
Lyrics are fine and suit the style of music

On to the mix
Guitars are nice and BIG and full
Bass is solid
Drums are good but in need of a real drumkit
The singing needs to improve a bit

But overall a good song and mix and you continue making more

Good Stuff
Tukkis
 
Real good song. At first I didn't like the contrast between the verses and chorus. But it grew on my pretty quickly. Catchy melody and good harmonies. Good guitars.

I liked the tone on the vocals. Kind of weird, but still cool.

There were a couple of performance issues. At :25 the lead vocal holds the note a couple seconds longer than the harmony. A couple of pitch issues (e.g., :49)

I could hear a little skip at :48.

Good job.
 
Thanks for your comments triplem,

i agree the performance of the singing could have been alot better. i do have a "wierd" voice and iv been told that by many people(good and bad).

im not all that great of a singer either but im working on that.

thanks for all your comments.


balshazza
 
I vote for awsome!:D

Guitars sound just great,especially on the verses.
Matter of fact all the instruments sound great.

Did you use a wah on the lead guitar?

Cool stuff!

Best to you,
Pete
 
i get that ska vibe in the verse's as well. i could pogo all over the place listening to this!!!!!!!

nice ending!!!

good song!!!

thank's

peace

rick
 
Balshazza,

I must say, very tight, well executed and dynamic rhythm on your tune. It is motivating and has so much going good for it. Damn, it's good!

I liked the arrangment. I'd cut the cymbal drool at the end and make it a true cold stop but, that's about it for changesIMHO.

The lead vox were O.K. I think if you try some tight, tight double tracking and/or a fast chorus effect, you could give it the fullness and candy/sugar/sweetness that I hear it asking for. Shoot for one tight lead vox but, use two or three tight leads with the right effect to get there.

Just my thoughts so.....

Coll tune dude,

Glad I listened:)

Theron.
 
Thanks for your thoughts guys, they mean alot.

Muzeman - on the lead solo i used an autowah on an effects processor. I think the solo sounds sick!!! but thats just me. I mean it wasnt all that crash hot guitar playing, but im mainly a bass player, i just play guitar casually. On my originals il play everything unless i want a real good guitar solo, then il get my bro to play it.

Fenderlickingood, Participant - Yeah when i wrote this song i was listening to alot of ska so i guess it rubbed off on me.

Theron - Thanks for the suggestions on the vocals. ill give that a go and see how it sounds.

Thanks everyone for listening to my song and giving me your opinion. no one has voted for crap yet so thank you again!

peace

balshazza
 
Keep Singing

I love it when singers have no confidence in their vocals...it adds an air of humility to an otherwise EGOMANIACAL crowd.

(1) Turn Lead Vox The Hell Up - Screw pitch control; let the fur fly. I really like this song, and I like the way you've recorded it...with one minor exception...

(2) Turn Harmony Vox the Hell Down - About 3 minutes in...the high backups come in pretty loud...(there's no missing them)...which is fine, so long as you follow suggestion #1.

(3) Keep singing

I've listened to it about half a dozen times, and I like it more with each pass...
 
good track....the guitar is very in time which gives the track a good hop......

my suggestions for the vocals.........
1) not as much double tracking, skip phrases or verses with backing, you're lead vocal doesn't get as much attention as it should

2) performance wise, turn up the monitor mix of the vocals and let it rip, it sounds like you're going through the motions......this is a common problem of mine, that's why i suggest it.
 
Yeah fellas il give that a go.

Chrisharris - i know what you mean about that high backing part about three minutes in, its shocking. i wouldve changed it sooner but im gonna have to re-record the bass aswell coz stupid cooledit has done something with my bass wav file and it keeps putting one from a different song in. im just a bit lazy at the moment. but dont worry it will happen.
Do you really think that my voice on its own, turned up would sound allright and not be a complete shame-out/embaressment?

Powderfinger - What do you mean by "going through the motions"?


thanks for your suggestions guys!
 
"going through the motions" is a way of saying that you do something just to get it done, but with a general lack of fire and intensity. thus, it would imply that you are more or less singing just to get something on tape.......rather than singing with urgency, and searching for a powerful vocal track........that is why i suggest turning your monitor mix up. trust me, your voice is not as weak as you think it is.......it is fine.....that is, if you sing like you mean it. i speak from being in similar situations.

this is just a guess, but it's kinda how i was a while back.........you don't think you're a strong singer, so in effect, you don't sing strongly or powerfully because of a general lack of confidence. do this.......keep your recorded vocal track so you can reference it, but then go in to a dark closet or anywhere you feel comfortable, and just belt the song into the mic like you're up onstage..........i mean be aggressive, think you're a badass. now get that track to sit good in the mix, give it a little extra volume (it always needs more than we think), and i guarantee you'll be more pleased with the result.....heck, maybe even with the proper compression, a little eq and reverb you might actually start thinking you can sing. when it comes to untrained singers like us, it's all about attitude. and a little attitude will go a long way. try what i said and tell me what you think.
 
THanks for that suggestion powderfinger. i know exactly what you mean.
I think to get comfortable il just need to have a few beers :)

What il try to do is just absolutely crank the song through my earphones and just get lost in the music and singing so that the entire world is oblivious to me. then i can jump around and have a blast.

il be recording one/two more originals in the next couple of days and il try all your suggestions. il post them and see what you think.

thanks heaps

balshazza
 
good call.............a little booze might help.......make sure you keep in key though. blast the mix, but blast the vocal part of the mix even more.........you need to be able to hear your own voice loud and clear over the rest of the mix....good luck with the rest of your recordings.
 
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