The vocal technique you are using is very 'intimate', as if you are close to us, you are close to the mic ...
You are talking to other men about 'shooting it' and 'unloading it', this is very personal.
You want inside our heads ... don't you ?
You are a third person narrator and you are talking very personally to the listener, this is 'intimate'.
It's almost like the old nudge, nudge ... wink, wink ...
The more reverb you use on this type of vocal, the more your listener may feel confused.
Because reverb promotes a feeling of space and distance, not intimacy.
This vocal would be awesomely effective much drier and crisper, and you can do this easily because your vocal is very low mid and is already naturally reverby, and the range you are singing in gives you the opportunity to dry this up and EQ it for fierceness without promoting a lot of sibilance.
I love the hook !!!
This is Austin type stuff ... spagetti western guitar ...
The break at 1:09 is cool.
gimmie some ...
the guitar at 2:40 is very unique ... totally awesome ... I wanna do that with my violin ... send it overnight please, in a little bottle and mark it 'fawkin crazeee' .
Now the vocal at 2:59 is flanged I believe and that is very effective to contrast with the vocal in the beginning, but I would back off on it bit and slide out of that whole thing instead of the abrupt change back to the straight vocal, treat that as a flow ... like a dynamic, an envelope.
The punch-in at 3:20 could be much smoother, need to draw an envelope on that 'new guitar' bring it in much smoother, over 2 or 3 measures.
The last set of hooks from 03:32 out need to be much, much louder, much more aggressive, possibly even screamed in chorus fashion ?
I like the bad conncection at the end, BUT
A big, big, big pet peeve of mine is the swipe of the hand on the neck of the guitar at the very end, this is not 'cool' ... it's very amateur. It totally destroys the mood. Ask yourself, do you want your listener to be left with a last impression of you that is one of the most often used closing techniques for a song that 'all' the amateurs use ... the song needs to be left alone at the very, very end. Let us think about what has happened, don't bump the needle, it's sitting nicely in our arm ... ;-)
