gecko zzed
Grumpy Mod
Here are the lyrics written by assorted posters for the October ~ November Challenge, which was to create a set of words on the theme of 'emptiness'.
I now invite participants in the challenge, as well as anyone else lurking around, to have a look at these lyrics and offer their comments, critiques and constructive criticisms. The idea is that participants now have a chance to rework their lyrics based (or not based) on your suggestions, before presenting them in a recorded song by the end of November.
[edit] I've fixed cnix's song name, and added nzausrec's lyrics.
Set free ~ cnix
Verse 1
It’s not the ending I had planned.
Her crumpled picture in my hand.
As her love for me fades, fades away.
I’m living with a broken heart.
Life’s meaningless with us apart.
Searching for a way, to make it through the day.
Chorus
I just want to live.
I just want to love.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief.
And be set free. And be set free.
Verse 2
All alone with nothing left inside.
Hollow feelings I can’t hide.
I’m living day by day, day by day.
Left with just an empty soul.
Drained by the love she stole.
Searching for a way, to make it through the day.
Chorus
I just want to live.
I just want to love.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief.
I just want to laugh.
I just want to cry.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief
And be set free, And be set free, And be set free
Gone ~ Strat1958
Empty house, empty streets
Same old same old, just repeats
Empty feeling in my soul
You had gone
Empty nights, empty days
Stumbling through it, in a haze
It was out, of my control
Since you’d gone
[CH]
Coming home, the room was cold
Overnight, I felt so old
Coming home, the light was on
But it was dark
Yeah it was dark
Because you’d gone
How did I help, create this mess?
The whistling wind, cried emptiness
I heard a voice outside the door
But you’d gone
I wouldn’t change, I wouldn’t say
That everything was not OK
My footsteps echoed, on the floor
Cause you’d gone
[BRIDGE]
Now there’s a phrase, time has a way
And tomorrow doesn’t have to be today
Don’t start over – start again
Pull some sunshine through the rain
[CH]
Coming home, the room is warm
Clouds are clearing, from the storm
Coming home, the light is on
My emptiness
My emptiness
Yeah my emptiness is nearly gone
Nonexistent ~ icystorm
Verse 1
You can believe what you want
I can't erase the way I feel
I know that you do not want me
and it's a fact colder than steel
Beyond the tides of Titan's pull
Behind a memory surreal
I take the pains of prayer to you
I kneel defenseless to your spell
Chorus
I'm nonexistent to you
I'm nonexistent in your eyes
Your words are all I cling to
My world means nothing in your life
If my nonexistence pleases you
I'll love you from the shadows of your mind
Verse 2
I can't deny what you want
You can't pretend you ever cared
I know that you do not love me
and that's a curse hotter than Hell
Beyond my crazy thoughts of you
Born of a hurt that's far too real
I bear the shame of loving you
I crawl and beg for what you sell
(repeat chorus)
Bridge
I'm far too gone I'll never hold you
I'm far too hurt to ever have you
If love is one too many ways to die
Why do I cry for you
emptiness ~ louisv
I've been walking
on a road so empty
no one drivin'
sidewalks lonely
tell me brother
how is mom doing
our loving mother
is she farm shopping
yeah what' up with dad
he remembers me?
glad he's not mad
at me..
and how about my big brother
he taught me everything
is he still a lawyer
just like i still sing
and hey what's up with you
is your cat alright
what you got two?
now thats not right
haha yeah i'm comming back
just to take some rest
but when i came back
home was an empty nest
Emptiness ~ upfiddler
When I seek I always find
Loneliness and me entwined.
Each passing hour does remind
Me of this Emptiness.
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
If I could simply find a friend
And not another passing trend.
I’d take their hand and we’d ascend
From this Emptiness.
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
So I slip back to my room
Wishing life could now resume.
Perhaps exchange this Baby Boom
For some dark Emptiness?
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
emptiness ~ gecko zzed
in a chest I kept my thoughts
safely under lock and key
when I opened up that box
there was nothing there
just emptiness
nothing left
for me
all my words had turned to dust
crumbled stories never told
I turned the casket upside down
and hoped for something left
no emptiness
nothing there
for me
I cannot find any words
left alive to tell the tale
I will have to start anew
This time I will not fail
I walk along an empty street
waiting inspiration's call
my feet kept up a steady beat
but there's nothing there
just emptiness
nothing there
at all
yellow dress ~ nzausrec
You're my girl
and forever will be mine
the sweetest apple on the trees
in any orchard
in any valley
Forever will be mine
forever will be mine
Born from your mother's pain
so proud so free
to watch you appear that day
Now without you I cry
A pretty meadow, a little stream
butterflies flying
a yellow dress
that flutters in the leaves
There's a little girl in your hands
Lord, a little girl in the palm of your hands
and you watch over her
and you look out for her
and you make a little place
where the good things are
and you watch over her
and you look out for her
and you make a little place
and I'll be with her once more
I now invite participants in the challenge, as well as anyone else lurking around, to have a look at these lyrics and offer their comments, critiques and constructive criticisms. The idea is that participants now have a chance to rework their lyrics based (or not based) on your suggestions, before presenting them in a recorded song by the end of November.
[edit] I've fixed cnix's song name, and added nzausrec's lyrics.
Set free ~ cnix
Verse 1
It’s not the ending I had planned.
Her crumpled picture in my hand.
As her love for me fades, fades away.
I’m living with a broken heart.
Life’s meaningless with us apart.
Searching for a way, to make it through the day.
Chorus
I just want to live.
I just want to love.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief.
And be set free. And be set free.
Verse 2
All alone with nothing left inside.
Hollow feelings I can’t hide.
I’m living day by day, day by day.
Left with just an empty soul.
Drained by the love she stole.
Searching for a way, to make it through the day.
Chorus
I just want to live.
I just want to love.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief.
I just want to laugh.
I just want to cry.
I just want to free her hold on me.
Break the chains that bind my grief
And be set free, And be set free, And be set free
Gone ~ Strat1958
Empty house, empty streets
Same old same old, just repeats
Empty feeling in my soul
You had gone
Empty nights, empty days
Stumbling through it, in a haze
It was out, of my control
Since you’d gone
[CH]
Coming home, the room was cold
Overnight, I felt so old
Coming home, the light was on
But it was dark
Yeah it was dark
Because you’d gone
How did I help, create this mess?
The whistling wind, cried emptiness
I heard a voice outside the door
But you’d gone
I wouldn’t change, I wouldn’t say
That everything was not OK
My footsteps echoed, on the floor
Cause you’d gone
[BRIDGE]
Now there’s a phrase, time has a way
And tomorrow doesn’t have to be today
Don’t start over – start again
Pull some sunshine through the rain
[CH]
Coming home, the room is warm
Clouds are clearing, from the storm
Coming home, the light is on
My emptiness
My emptiness
Yeah my emptiness is nearly gone
Nonexistent ~ icystorm
Verse 1
You can believe what you want
I can't erase the way I feel
I know that you do not want me
and it's a fact colder than steel
Beyond the tides of Titan's pull
Behind a memory surreal
I take the pains of prayer to you
I kneel defenseless to your spell
Chorus
I'm nonexistent to you
I'm nonexistent in your eyes
Your words are all I cling to
My world means nothing in your life
If my nonexistence pleases you
I'll love you from the shadows of your mind
Verse 2
I can't deny what you want
You can't pretend you ever cared
I know that you do not love me
and that's a curse hotter than Hell
Beyond my crazy thoughts of you
Born of a hurt that's far too real
I bear the shame of loving you
I crawl and beg for what you sell
(repeat chorus)
Bridge
I'm far too gone I'll never hold you
I'm far too hurt to ever have you
If love is one too many ways to die
Why do I cry for you
emptiness ~ louisv
I've been walking
on a road so empty
no one drivin'
sidewalks lonely
tell me brother
how is mom doing
our loving mother
is she farm shopping
yeah what' up with dad
he remembers me?
glad he's not mad
at me..
and how about my big brother
he taught me everything
is he still a lawyer
just like i still sing
and hey what's up with you
is your cat alright
what you got two?
now thats not right
haha yeah i'm comming back
just to take some rest
but when i came back
home was an empty nest
Emptiness ~ upfiddler
When I seek I always find
Loneliness and me entwined.
Each passing hour does remind
Me of this Emptiness.
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
If I could simply find a friend
And not another passing trend.
I’d take their hand and we’d ascend
From this Emptiness.
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
So I slip back to my room
Wishing life could now resume.
Perhaps exchange this Baby Boom
For some dark Emptiness?
All alone
Yet I’m surrounded.
The gates of hell
Have clearly sounded.
A time to reap
And time to sow.
The meter clangs
It’s time to go.
emptiness ~ gecko zzed
in a chest I kept my thoughts
safely under lock and key
when I opened up that box
there was nothing there
just emptiness
nothing left
for me
all my words had turned to dust
crumbled stories never told
I turned the casket upside down
and hoped for something left
no emptiness
nothing there
for me
I cannot find any words
left alive to tell the tale
I will have to start anew
This time I will not fail
I walk along an empty street
waiting inspiration's call
my feet kept up a steady beat
but there's nothing there
just emptiness
nothing there
at all
yellow dress ~ nzausrec
You're my girl
and forever will be mine
the sweetest apple on the trees
in any orchard
in any valley
Forever will be mine
forever will be mine
Born from your mother's pain
so proud so free
to watch you appear that day
Now without you I cry
A pretty meadow, a little stream
butterflies flying
a yellow dress
that flutters in the leaves
There's a little girl in your hands
Lord, a little girl in the palm of your hands
and you watch over her
and you look out for her
and you make a little place
where the good things are
and you watch over her
and you look out for her
and you make a little place
and I'll be with her once more
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sounded real cool.