Not Goodbye, Hello (Original, which I am pretty proud of!)

[propman]

Hey guys. This is one of the songs that I sat down and tried really hard to write, and took equal effort to record, and I am really happy with what I got. I am really anxious to get your imput/response.
Not Goodbye, Hello

Lyrics:
I had a hand full of letters I wrote that I needed to send.
A bus that moved real fast drove by me and I lost them to the wind.
Now I guess I'll never get to apologize to that one friend.

Blasted conscience who conned science don't start up again.
I know that I screwed up pretty bad but my patience just wore thin.
The angel and death dude on my shoulder just sat there 'till the one with horns chimed in.

Don't be silent.
Wreck their life and let them go.
Throw a great big fit and make sure their demise is nice and slow.
Then the other guy says "Wait a minute, no! Not goodbye, hello!"

The letter that I wrote had graveling dripping out the envelopes flap.
The words were mudded from the tears that fell from my eyes to the notepad in my lap.
I should have seen the right thing but the anger blinded me and sent me walking into a trap.

Mmm, you know it's hard to see
all the good through a little bit of misery.
But when you do,
You'll save youself the bull crap and the melodramatics too.

Don't be silent.
Wreck their life and let them go.
Throw a great big fit and make sure their demise is nice and slow.
Then the other guy says "Wait a minute, no! Not goodbye, hello!"

-Adam.

 

[lifelyrics]

Hi Adam,

I read the lyrics first, and wondered how you were going to get all the words to work in a song, but it worked well. One thing I noticed, maybe just preference, I'm not sure, but it seemed that the bell (?) sound was too predominant. Maybe not in volume, but I had the sense that it was out in front of everything else.

You did a couple of things right at the end that I would have liked to hear throughout the song: Your harmonies and the guitar. Very nice, and I think it would complement the song to add them earlier on.

 

[rockstudio]

I like it. Reminds me of the postal service - the band, not the guy with my junk mail.

Great job on the production, too. I'm impressed.

 

[The Cancers]

Another great song. I can tell you've got some they might be giants influence, and I wouldn't be surprised if there was some Ben Folds in there as well. You're working your way towards pop unclassifiability, which is barely a word, but a very good thing. You've got my buying dollar when you want it.

 

[propman]

Hi Adam,

I read the lyrics first, and wondered how you were going to get all the words to work in a song, but it worked well. One thing I noticed, maybe just preference, I'm not sure, but it seemed that the bell (?) sound was too predominant. Maybe not in volume, but I had the sense that it was out in front of everything else.

You did a couple of things right at the end that I would have liked to hear throughout the song: Your harmonies and the guitar. Very nice, and I think it would complement the song to add them earlier on.

I agree with you very much. I had the same feelings about the production, but after hearing it a few times, I got to I guess, attached to the way it sounded to add anything. Call me sentemental.

I like it. Reminds me of the postal service - the band, not the guy with my junk mail.

Great job on the production, too. I'm impressed.

Thanks! I haven't heard much of the postal service, but what I have heard, that is indeed a complement to me. Thank you very much!

Another great song. I can tell you've got some they might be giants influence, and I wouldn't be surprised if there was some Ben Folds in there as well. You're working your way towards pop unclassifiability, which is barely a word, but a very good thing. You've got my buying dollar when you want it.

Thanks man! That has to be one of the nicest comments I have gotten. About Ben Folds, the only song I have heard of his is Cigarette, which I really like. I just haven't gotten around to anything else. TMBG is one of if not my favorite band, and I have gotten into music by this guy named Andrew Bird lately. I got his album The Mysterious Production of Eggs, and I really like it a lot. Very entertaining to listen to. I also like the track off of his new album called Oh No. But anyway, again, Thank you very much for the VERY kind comment.

-Adam.

 

[The Cancers]

Good call on the Andrew Bird.
Now do yourself a favor and go get Whatever and Ever Amen. It's the Ben Folds Five album that has cigarette on it, and I think you'll be pleased and surprised with his sense of humor and range. Also, check out his song "My Philosophy." It's a torch rock song written to his penis, and is in my opinion the funniest pop rock song since the Kinks wrote Lola.

 

[dodgeaspen]

I like the words but the music needed time to grow on me.

 

[propman]

Good call on the Andrew Bird.
Now do yourself a favor and go get Whatever and Ever Amen. It's the Ben Folds Five album that has cigarette on it, and I think you'll be pleased and surprised with his sense of humor and range. Also, check out his song "My Philosophy." It's a torch rock song written to his penis, and is in my opinion the funniest pop rock song since the Kinks wrote Lola.

I'll try to look into that. Thanks!

I like the words but the music needed time to grow on me.

To each his own. At leat it did grow on you. Thanks.

-Adam.

 

[rayc]

You melodic style in the last two verses reminded me abit of Little Purple Circles - an HR band & truly exceptional writer/performers/producers.
It was also nice to hear some acoustic guitar as a counter to the layers of electronics.
Really terrific song Adam. You crank them out but you've kept the quality levels high.
I have to exhibit my ignorance - "gravelling"! vas iz Das?

 

[aidan_m]

Loving the production on this, sounds great.. I kinda agreed at the start the bell thingy was a bit much, but by the end of the song it's grown on me!

 

[propman]

You melodic style in the last two verses reminded me abit of Little Purple Circles - an HR band & truly exceptional writer/performers/producers.
It was also nice to hear some acoustic guitar as a counter to the layers of electronics.
Really terrific song Adam. You crank them out but you've kept the quality levels high.
I have to exhibit my ignorance - "gravelling"! vas iz Das?

Hey dude. Good to hear from you. The comparason to Little Purple Circles is a flattering one! I love their music. I do tend to "crank the out" don't I? I don't know if that's good or bad. I just record and write when I feel like it. I don't usually feel like I am rushing anything. I just like to see a song through in one sitting. Even if it is hours on end. My cover of Good Vibrations took about 23 straight hours to complete. I feel like sometimes, I don't keep up my quality. Sometimes I feel like I could have done better. I was actually pretty proud of this one though. It's the first one in a while that I have been really proud to show off. Oh, and the word I was searching for was "Groveling". I couldn't find the proper spelling for it at the time. Sorry. Now I feel like an idiot.
"1. to humble oneself or act in an abject manner, as in great fear or utter servility." Thanks for the comment dude.

Loving the production on this, sounds great.. I kinda agreed at the start the bell thingy was a bit much, but by the end of the song it's grown on me!

Thanks a lot. I agree to a point. The only reason I think that is is because it is bare. There isn't much in the mix at that point and the bells kind of stand almost alone. Maybe they shouldn't have, but I wanted to start minimal, and work my way up in instrumental layers. Thanks for the comment, and I'm glad you liked it!


-Adam.

 

[Greg_L]

Sounds good Adam. I don't hear any problems with the mix.

It's always funny to me to hear your music and compare it to myself when I was 16. I just don't understand how a 16 year old makes music like this. That's not a knock against you, just a generational thing I guess. When I was 16, hair metal was still king and I was playing in punk bands just trying to be louder and faster than the next guy. Really, I guess not much has changed for me in 20 years.

But you have a knack for this kind of stuff and you do it very well. Keep up the good work.

 

[ColinW]

I like it! Nice melody and chord progression.

Nits would be the xylophone (?) is too penetrating early on, and some of the lyrics are crammed in. As an example:

"I should have seen the right thing but the anger blinded me and sent me walking into a trap"

would sing better as

"I should have seen the right thing but the anger blinded me, I walked into a trap"

Your choice - good job.

 

[propman]

Sounds good Adam. I don't hear any problems with the mix.

It's always funny to me to hear your music and compare it to myself when I was 16. I just don't understand how a 16 year old makes music like this. That's not a knock against you, just a generational thing I guess. When I was 16, hair metal was still king and I was playing in punk bands just trying to be louder and faster than the next guy. Really, I guess not much has changed for me in 20 years.

But you have a knack for this kind of stuff and you do it very well. Keep up the good work.

Thank you very much Greg! I don't know how either. I try not to think about it to much, I just do it. I don't really hold myself in a high reguard. I'm still learning. I think your music is really kickin! You say I have a knack for what I do, and if that's true, than you sure do! You're a really good musician, and you need to keep cranking them out to!

I like it! Nice melody and chord progression.

Nits would be the xylophone (?) is too penetrating early on, and some of the lyrics are crammed in. As an example:

"I should have seen the right thing but the anger blinded me and sent me walking into a trap"

would sing better as

"I should have seen the right thing but the anger blinded me, I walked into a trap"

Your choice - good job.

The cramming was intended. I wanted that certain melody, or sound to flow that way. Thanks for listning, and thanks for the comment!

-Adam.