New version of "Unread". Remixed based on your advice and comments. Let me know.

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New version of "Unread". Remixed based on your advice and comments. Let me know.

Hi folks,

The new version is up:
"Unread" http://mp3.com/smartapple

If you have the old version on your hard drive, do a before and after comparison... There's a huge difference (in my opinion) sonically...

Let me know if you think it's decent enough to say "it's done".
I can easily do a remix if you think it needs it.

Thanks again!
 
oh Teddie .... Much betteron the chorus !!!!!


I think you could still bring the vocals up a little ... but MUCH better .. I can now understand them ...


I still love it !!! Lana
 
Hi Teddie,

Listened 3 times to the remix and had these comments:

During the chorus there's a lead guitar part ringing way in the back.....it seemed to me that it's softer in the first chorus than the others....it sounds better to me when it's louder in the later chorus.

As Mr Lip poited out in the original post of this song I also hear some dissonance in the harmony on the word "heart" in the first chorus.

The transition from the lead nearing the end back into the verse is FANTASTIC!.....great attention to detail!

As far as which is better: I liked the first mix...just seemed to have more of an edge somehow...

You already know how much I liked the song (no matter which mix!)....were the lyrics posted on your mp3 page originally and then removed?
 
lanac, thanks for listening again. I think I've got one more remix in me :) I'll try to bring up those vocals a little more, I think you're right - just a tad more though. (glad you stuck around by the way).

MAC2, ah, good ear... I didn't notice the level lower on that lead... I'll fix that... Yeah, that dissonance on "heart"... it's bugging me.... I'm going to fix that.. I think I can fix it visually without having to sing it over again... this will be interesting. The transition you're talking about; are you talking about the lead end to "in her fist..."?

You like the other mix better? Really? Are you doing a side-by-side? By the way, I'm doing another mix tonight... I'm gonna fix the things mentioned, plus....

... the dang lowest tom-tom... in the left channel, I think it's over saturated... it kind of overloads... I think in the effort to make the kick drum more prominent, I may have screwed up that tom.... No biggie though... I can isolate that lowest tom and fix it visually... but it's definitely a problem to my ears.

Oh, by the way, the lyrics might have gone away for a bit because of the update or something... they're back.

Okay, folks... new remix coming up... I'll do it tonight so it should be posted in a couple of days....

Someone give me more advice if you can ---- quick :) so I can use it for this remix... (just kidding... I'm sure this won't be the last mix of this... although, I hope it is)...
 
...yep....right before "in her fist...." The word "silence" is great too....love that kinda of stuff where the music and lyric work together like that!
 
Okay, I updated it again. I upped the vocals a little bit. fixed the low frequency overload on the lowest tom-tom. Upped the level on that little riding lead in the main chorus. Tried to fix the dissonance on that one pre-chorus vocal... and did some little tweaks here and there.

The 3rd version is up on my page http://mp3.com/smartapple

:) I've gotta get some breakfast and coffee... I'm all out of whack...

Hey, thanks again everyone... let me know if this is a good version.
 
Well, I missed the second version, but I think the third version does sound better. The kick drum is much better now and the guitars have a little more bite, too. Sounds llike you brought the drums up on the chorus too which helps a lot. The only criticism I have left is that the floor tom is panned too hard. Its kind of distracting (even though its only hit a few times) being so far left. How did you mic the drums anyway? Later.

Ben
 
gnarled, actually the drums are canned. The floor tom is a bit left... although I think it might have been the freq I upped that caused the distraction... (maybe). The floor tom is loud loud if I don't tweak the freqs back down on it after trying to get the kick to stand out and thump. I think I fixed it on this "final?" mix. Yah, I remixed it again after what you said about the floor tom... I agree with ya... lemme know what you think of it now...

It's here: http://mp3.com/smartapple
Song: "Unread"

Thanks again,
Teddie (Smart Apple)
 
Not having heard the first 3 mixes, I assume whatever you wanted to fix got fixed........because this one is great......the drum sound worked........everything worked....dig the lyrics too.......

If I could get a sound that good at home, I'd quit my day job.........no, wait....I don't have a day job....never mind.......gibs
 
This tune's got a great feeling. The decision to go back and forth between that "clear" sound and the "grungy" sound helped to define the grunge, but it needs more help (the grungy part) to take it all the way to grungy, as opposed to muddy. It's like the parts are burying each other instead of supporting each other.
In a few places I just wanted the vocals more defined, and maybe a tad louder. Maybe a collab with a drummer who can mic their kit?
 
gibs, thank you bro.

drstawl, hey friend. Yeah, this one has really given me troubles. "Thunder on the Mountain" gave me the same type of troubles and the way the chorus is in both songs is very similar. I can't help but think I'm over compensating or undercompensating for something due to the fact that when I do a song with this type of chorus I can't get a decent vocal harmony thing going. Like with "Thunder..." there was a regular vocal part and then the part that tried to harmonize with it was merely mirroring it 12-steps above it (I think that is correct terminology - I think) where my voice is straining and really kinda shitty. And I might be subconsiously trying to mask things in the music with funked up level settings or something. Was the parts that you wanted the vox a tad louder only in the heavy chorus parts?

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Wow, i was really impressed with this song! I could find no fault with the vocals; the backup gave it a little Steven Tyler ring i thought. I thought the distortion on the guitar was just a tad too much in a couple of places, but so minimal that it is probably just a matter of opinion. I really like your style and this kind of music.

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p.s. i only heard the latest version; you must have fixed everything right.
 
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