New Song!

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Is my song any good?

  • 10(Best)

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 8(Good)

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 5(Average)

    Votes: 4 33.3%

  • -1(Terrible!)

    Votes: 8 66.7%
  • Total voters
    12
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Ok, so a while ago, I let you guys listen to a few of my songs on my MySpace, well this time I did a different song to see what you all thought of it.

I know the lyrics aren't the best in the world.

I also know that I don't have the greatest voice in the world for this, but I'm going to get better so criticize me damn it.

Don't point out the fact that the vocals skipped on a few parts, because I know that.

Give me credit, I do this all by myself on my HP Laptop and nothing more but a 70 dollar microphone. The microphone sucks, I also know that.

The beat is not mine, I give total credit to OPBeats. But, keep me updated and let me know how the song is over all, I'll throw a poll on here so it's easier and lets me know for sure.

Thanks in advance.



Enjoy!

*shrieks*
 
I didn't listen to it, but c'mon mayne......................

You shouldn't have done this!
 
Trumpspade said:
I didn't listen to it, but c'mon mayne......................

You shouldn't have done this!
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Only way I'm going to improve, is by trial and error.

I need to know what people think I need to improve on and keep trying to get better at, so why shouldn't I have done this? This is what I'm after, is what people think. Til' I get good enough. So, Trial and error.

To each their own.
 
Re-Lapse said:
Only way I'm going to improve, is by trial and error.

I need to know what people think I need to improve on and keep trying to get better at, so why shouldn't I have done this? This is what I'm after, is what people think. Til' I get good enough. So, Trial and error.

To each their own.
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Bravo. Are you rapping to all of us in this song. Balls.
Be careful with your flow, sometimes you speed up like you did on the last songs. "It's the love of the music..." has a great flow, I'd change the chorus from "It's not for the money, no its not for the cash," to "It's not forthe money, no not for the fame," it rhymes with "name," and "game," that type of repitition of sounds works really well in rap and would fit nicely in the chorus.
 
I woulve gave it a 6 but I see ur using the kick and snare more to your advantage
 
Cult_Status02 said:
Bravo. Are you rapping to all of us in this song. Balls.
Be careful with your flow, sometimes you speed up like you did on the last songs. "It's the love of the music..." has a great flow, I'd change the chorus from "It's not for the money, no its not for the cash," to "It's not forthe money, no not for the fame," it rhymes with "name," and "game," that type of repitition of sounds works really well in rap and would fit nicely in the chorus.
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Precisely.

I realized that, I'll have to re-record it and do it again.

Also, the chorus line fix, thanks I was actually thinking about that after I heard it, I was like hmm.. and then when I was rappin' it to myself I actually said fame instead of cash, so, I think I'll refit that into it. Thanks for the advice, and the comment. It's much appreciated.

:D
 
Also use some more EMOTION homie...Im not an Emcee but i KNOW ur lacking that in ur rhymes...Ur spittin even calmer than Baby Bash
 
Noddy301 said:
Also use some more EMOTION homie...Im not an Emcee but i KNOW ur lacking that in ur rhymes...Ur spittin even calmer than Baby Bash
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Thanks, I'll try man. Definitely, thanks for the input.

I'm not the greatest, but by golly I'm at least trying :D
 
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Only way I'm going to improve, is by trial and error.

I need to know what people think I need to improve on and keep trying to get better at, so why shouldn't I have done this? This is what I'm after, is what people think. Til' I get good enough. So, Trial and error.

To each their own.
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What I mean is I think it was kind of corny to put a poll on how well we think your music was. Just post it and it will be critiqued! A poll probably won't help you determine what you're lacking.
But I did take a listen and it is not that bad. I think Average is my grade, but I agree with the others, feel more comfortable in your flow.......Find you and do it!

Disregard the -1(Terrible) poll vote, that was me, I meant to vote (5) Average!
My bad!
 
Lyrics are soo bad why would ever put out something like this. I cant rap, I have no talent, I cant write, Im white I shgouldnt be dong this. THEN FUCKEN STOP! Theres nothing really I want to hear about these lyrics.

Now the beats good but thats not yours just like every other untalented rapper. Your vocals sound like a frog why did you double it up like that? It gets louder it some parts and you get faster at some parts that dont even flow.

I hate to be mean but theres way to many rappers like you I guess you have to get better some how but just cuase rapping bad is easy doesnt mean everyone should do it. Am I being harsh maybe but I really just have a strong passion about this?

The love of the music... just listen it to it dont make bad music.
 
DAS19 said:
Lyrics are soo bad why would ever put out something like this. I cant rap, I have no talent, I cant write, Im white I shgouldnt be dong this. THEN FUCKEN STOP! Theres nothing really I want to hear about these lyrics.

Now the beats good but thats not yours just like every other untalented rapper. Your vocals sound like a frog why did you double it up like that? It gets louder it some parts and you get faster at some parts that dont even flow.

I hate to be mean but theres way to many rappers like you I guess you have to get better some how but just cuase rapping bad is easy doesnt mean everyone should do it. Am I being harsh maybe but I really just have a strong passion about this?

The love of the music... just listen it to it dont make bad music.
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If you hate to be mean, then don't be mean. I'm using your technique of letting me know that I suck. You know what? THe reason I wrote that song was because of a previous thread that everyone said I sucked in. I'm getting a hell of alot better than I was when I started.

Who are you to tell me that I'm terrible? You weren't born an incredible artist, you worked hard at it and got to where you're at now. For all I know, you suck to. I don't take comments like this and get all discouraged, because I know damn well I can do better. People like you, are what make me continue doing this, to prove you wrong, to prove you TOTALLY wrong.

You'll see one day, that I'm not that bad and I can get better. Next time you give a comment Be a little bit more helpful, rather than a pure asshole. kthx.

:D

Thanks for the comment, never the less.
 
Trumpspade said:
What I mean is I think it was kind of corny to put a poll on how well we think your music was. Just post it and it will be critiqued! A poll probably won't help you determine what you're lacking.
But I did take a listen and it is not that bad. I think Average is my grade, but I agree with the others, feel more comfortable in your flow.......Find you and do it!

Disregard the -1(Terrible) poll vote, that was me, I meant to vote (5) Average!
My bad!
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Thanks for the vote, thanks for the comment, the only reason I put the poll up, was for a more "visual" reminder. So I can work harder, ya know?

Thanks though :)
 
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Thanks for the vote, thanks for the comment, the only reason I put the poll up, was for a more "visual" reminder. So I can work harder, ya know?

Thanks though :)
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Keep at it!
 
Re-Lapse,

You gotta chill out man. Folks are just telling you what you asked them to tell you. It's not their fault if they don't like what your putting out, but you keep pushing yourself on everyone and asking for feedback and then disagreeing with the feedback.

Sometimes as a musician, you just need to go back to the woodshed (guitarist lingo) and keep practicing until you get better - there's no way to shortcut that. You are at that stage - you need to go to the woodshed and keep working and practicing untill you can rhyme and flow and deliver just like the folks have said. When have done that and put in the time and effort, then what you produce will be better - you'll know when it is good enough to share with other folks because you know where it is lacking now.

Please don't turn into one of the type of folks who are rejected by Amercan Idol and then make a fool of themselves by insisting that the judges don't know what they're talking about - because the judges do know.

We all want you to keep at it - now go to the woodshed and practice those chops.....
 
sjfoote said:
Re-Lapse,

You gotta chill out man. Folks are just telling you what you asked them to tell you. It's not their fault if they don't like what your putting out, but you keep pushing yourself on everyone and asking for feedback and then disagreeing with the feedback.

Sometimes as a musician, you just need to go back to the woodshed (guitarist lingo) and keep practicing until you get better - there's no way to shortcut that. You are at that stage - you need to go to the woodshed and keep working and practicing untill you can rhyme and flow and deliver just like the folks have said. When have done that and put in the time and effort, then what you produce will be better - you'll know when it is good enough to share with other folks because you know where it is lacking now.

Please don't turn into one of the type of folks who are rejected by Amercan Idol and then make a fool of themselves by insisting that the judges don't know what they're talking about - because the judges do know.

We all want you to keep at it - now go to the woodshed and practice those chops.....
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Thanks it means alot, that wasn't what I was getting after. What I was getting after by that comment is someone can comment on my music and I love the feedback, good or bad. But when someone tells me bluntly that I have no talent? That's basically what he said. I'm not trying to get him to like my lyrics, as he said. I'm not going to make it big, this is a hobby. I write how I feel, and I write from the heart, THAT is what true music is about, in my opinion. So if he doesn't like it, that's fine by me, I love comments of people that don't like it, but can't they tell me what they don't like about it and how to improve, rather than.. "uhh you suck, that's stupid, stop, you're ruining hiphop all together"..basically what he said...in his input. but never the less, I love music, and I'll contiue to work hard.

I swear, I will get better.

Thanks for the comment and the input :D

Back to the shed ;)
 
hmmmmmm

Ok first all of all the eminem lose yourself type beat put some weight on u to be at least pretty good and right now you are not there............but u can get better. I can listen to you and you are in that stage where you are about to go into a direction....just make sure its in the right one. Practice, practice, practice. Oh and like someone else said do not talk down on yourself ever again.......ever. Like someone said if u dont believe in yourself aint nobody else gone believe in your ass. Period. Keep at it man, I gave u a -1 but I didnt want to but all I saw was like a 5 and u wasnt there either so I rounded down. Keep at it.
 
traw said:
Ok first all of all the eminem lose yourself type beat put some weight on u to be at least pretty good and right now you are not there............but u can get better. I can listen to you and you are in that stage where you are about to go into a direction....just make sure its in the right one. Practice, practice, practice. Oh and like someone else said do not talk down on yourself ever again.......ever. Like someone said if u dont believe in yourself aint nobody else gone believe in your ass. Period. Keep at it man, I gave u a -1 but I didnt want to but all I saw was like a 5 and u wasnt there either so I rounded down. Keep at it.
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Thanks for the advice bro, I appreciate it. I'll keep working on it, and keep practicing. I won't put up another song til' "I" think it's worthy of a listen.

I'm going to get better, one way or another.

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A) DO NOT be so self-depricating in your lyrics, honestly it makes everyone hate you
B) dude i see where where you are coming from. if you really love the music then keep trying as hard as you can
C) say something. that's all. something.
 
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