New song! Very Dynamic need critiques

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Hey Guys and Gals,

I finished up a new song this weekend and put a rough mix on it. It has clean guitar and keyboard and works up to a metal crecendo. Please give it a listen and tell me if my miking techniques are getting closer to par. Thanks as allways much appreciated.

Jay

Set me free(insanity)
http://www.nowhereradio.com/vesuvius/singles
 
not bad...

I like the sound, but for me this song was a bit difficult to follow (maybe it is really just me...) dynamic it is, I like the swell at about 1:00 or so...

the change from intro to verse? was a bit abrupt...
the vocals sound interesting and catchy but it is almost, on my computer, not audible. I could not make out many words.

Maybe I'll try to listen again later when I get to my real audio setup at home...

Get back,
-Humble-
 
an original song :)

I think the panning of the drums is a bit too much, but the clean guitar sounds good. Interesting effects on the vocals :) When the distorted guitar kicks in it sounds good as well, but its kinda overpowered by the vocals and they could be in their place a bit better. Maybe some EQ that might help the guitars stand out?
Cool work, original too..
 
very mysterious, almost too much for me. Dark, deep, and pre-primal sounding. I didnt care much for the tone on the intro guitar, but after the full score kicked in it was good. The vocals were too far out of my league to decipher, not real crazy about that. the parts were tracked good and the micing sounds like its gettin everything well. I think some more mixing and eq might organize it a bit more. But again this isnt my genre.
 
ok here it goes

Ok first thing im noticing is that there are some timing issues? Right when everything comes in, its sort of abrubt and not together. Im guessing thats a drum machine, if thats the case try and sync your guitar tracks a little better.
The guitar sounds a little out of tune in places and the strings are kind of dead sounding.
Sounds like you pitch shifted the real vocal really low, from what i can tell the detuned vocal is louder than the real one, try and back off on the low one so we can hear your real voice.
Wow reading back through that it sounds like im very negative so i will say that i can sort of visualize what your going for. Work on polishing it up a little and it sounds like it may be a neat little tune.
 
Thanks everyone for listening. I know there are some performance issues here. Very simple for me to retrack the clean guitar. I will work it up a bit more and then do a re-visit.

Thanks Again,

Jay
 
I am feeling what you are going for here. I cant understand what you are saying, but in my case maybe that is for the best. There are some recording issues here that have been covered already so...The drums are buried in the mix. Metal NEEDS those powerful Lars type drums!!! This is quite an undertaking and I think for the most part you pulled it off pretty good. I just feel that the mix needs some type of sonic maximizing or something to give it some life and presence.


Let it Rock
Mike
 
Hey Jay,

Sounds like you were trying for a Rob Zombie type vocal. Not bad, could use a tad less effects to make the vocals sound cleaner.

I listened up to the 3:40 mark. It has some good chord progressions, some nice dynamics, and yes there are timing issues. But what I heard was not bad.

Any chance of you doing another mix with the only fx used on your voice is a slight reverb? You're not afraid to let us hear your "real singing" are you? :)
 
love the uneasy feel of the intro....
im on phones..ok whenit kicks in it falls apart with the drums..
it falls back in place quick enough but i would fix that it really sticks out after that kick ass intro ...
if you are really singing actual words i cant tell...lol..???
i dig the song..dont get me wrong.

ok i made out SET ME FREE!!!!
i would fix the vocal either bring it out more or retrack it so it is audible...it seems like you have a few vocals layered on top of each other...maybe you could mix one more out front ...not sure.



great start tho!...all the guitar parts fit together nice.
cool it gets heavy!
bring the drums up in that part !!!...buried pretty deep .
yeah maybe its the genre of this ...but i wish i could hear the vocal more over all the growling.
cool double picking guitar in that second section!

ok im done.
jamal


:D
 
Thanks again all you guys! I am working on a retrack of the clean guitar so I can fix tune, tune and timing issues. I can bring the clean vox out if you think it will have more power. The drums should be easy to bring forward! Although I wish I had a real drum kit to record so I could play in some "lars type" riffages. PC drummer will have to work for now...:|
 
homeuser said:
Hey Jay,

Sounds like you were trying for a Rob Zombie type vocal. Not bad, could use a tad less effects to make the vocals sound cleaner.

I listened up to the 3:40 mark. It has some good chord progressions, some nice dynamics, and yes there are timing issues. But what I heard was not bad.

Any chance of you doing another mix with the only fx used on your voice is a slight reverb? You're not afraid to let us hear your "real singing" are you? :)
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Dude, I have another bluesy, psychedelic, folky project as well with alot of keyboard work. We are tracking a few out now, all clean, super melodic, layered vox. I'll post one as soon as I think I have it good enough for critique!

Jay\m/
 
Just an opinion, but for the clean guitar at the beginning I would make it really wet. It seems a little too dry compared to the rest of the tune. Like some heavy delay and reverb and stuff to try to capture the feel of the rest of the tune. And yeah, back off the effects on the vox a little. If I could hear the lyrics it would make the song much more enjoyable and maybe help me advance thru the song along with the music. As it is, I really don't know why there are time changes or tempo changes or whatever cuz I don't know the story. And the high hat is too high in the mix. That's all I hear. But the song itself is pretty cool.
 
Just came to me. What I actually wanted to hear for the clean guitar was some delay and light chorus to give it a more dreamy feel. Not reverb.
 
I like the vibe going on with the guitars and keyboards. Can't understand much. There are parts of the melody that are cool, it'd be nice to understand the words.

Little timing thing with a guitar at :37. Some brief, and I believe unintended, distortion at 4:06.

A highly personal statement, but at over 8 minutes in length I can't listen all the way through without understanding anything. It doesn't sound to me like your singing voice is bad - I didn't notice any pitchiness. Maybe one or two small spots (and very correctable). My strong recommendation would be to clean them up. As I said, just my opinion.

Trip...
 
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