New Song-"Rhythms": day 1

[SLuiCe]

Hi Ho, Kermit D Frog here...

Oh sorry...

I'm working on an acoustic song-gone-mad and I think it's at the point where it could use some fresh ears. I struggled a bit with the vocal performance early this morning so I may go back and retrack some of it. But the ideas are there and I think they might be ready for some mixing/composition advice. Thanks!

"Rhythms"
www.nowhereradio.com/sluice/singles

 

[Lt. Bob]

I like the song. Sounds like the vocal part might be a little too low for you sometimes. Also on my speakers the acoustic was a little boomy. Might just be my speakers.
I really like your syle of writing a lot. And what the heck was that bizarre rhythm thing about 30 - 40 seconds in. That was cool. How'd you do that?