Hello All
Please review My latest attempt for song structure melody and lyric
The recording is still very rudimentry and needs a great deal of work
Ive ripped this thing to shreds so many times an rewrote rewrote rewrote .
Its called Life after 40
http://www.reverbnation.com/peterkielburger
I think the pieces are there but the arrangemnt troubles me Is it still considered a chorus if it dosent repeat ?
I kinda like where i went with the bridge but after I listn to it a few times I wonder if its a little over the top
Id appeciate your input
Cheers
Peter
Im over halfway there
the years have flown
When I look inside myself
I like to think that have grown
but it dosent really matter
cause theres no startin over
I wont say
Id live it all the same
cause I have hurt and felt my share of pain
I know hindsights 20/20
but i cant help looking back
Chorus
Sometimes it takes a little longer
to be a little stronger
strong enough to see where you went wrong
to take what you've been given
and get down to the livin'
you only get one ride
and then it's gone
Instrumental verse
bridge
and days like leaves are falling fast
in the autumn of my life
but ive learned my lessonfrom the past
live for today
forget the sorrow
love every way
embrace tommorow
alive
inside
Please review My latest attempt for song structure melody and lyric
The recording is still very rudimentry and needs a great deal of work
Ive ripped this thing to shreds so many times an rewrote rewrote rewrote .
Its called Life after 40
http://www.reverbnation.com/peterkielburger
I think the pieces are there but the arrangemnt troubles me Is it still considered a chorus if it dosent repeat ?
I kinda like where i went with the bridge but after I listn to it a few times I wonder if its a little over the top
Id appeciate your input
Cheers
Peter
Im over halfway there
the years have flown
When I look inside myself
I like to think that have grown
but it dosent really matter
cause theres no startin over
I wont say
Id live it all the same
cause I have hurt and felt my share of pain
I know hindsights 20/20
but i cant help looking back
Chorus
Sometimes it takes a little longer
to be a little stronger
strong enough to see where you went wrong
to take what you've been given
and get down to the livin'
you only get one ride
and then it's gone
Instrumental verse
bridge
and days like leaves are falling fast
in the autumn of my life
but ive learned my lessonfrom the past
live for today
forget the sorrow
love every way
embrace tommorow
alive
inside