If those are real drums they're awfully weirdly recorded.
I think you should put some Arabic drums behind the first section of this. I don't know why, it just seems right.
Nice, pretty tight work, just doesn't have the kind of rhythmic drive behind it that it needs. I, for some reason, really need it to have an Arabic drumbeat behind it.
Interesting sounding singer, is alittle loose on the first few lines but the singing really tightens up.
...The screaming sections really lose me. You just sound like you stepped on a lot of nails. You don't really have a lyrical explanation of why you're angry.