New Song Demo: for Critique

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The mix sounds like you were trying to hide things rather than bring the best out.

I would retrack most of it. Focus on what is gonna carry the song and make it kick ass. Get things intonated and tuned up, cut excess chatter from things (bass) and focus on what's important.

The clapping at the end is in severe contrast to what I was thinking at the end...
 
Thanks for the feedback, jake. Always something to learn...
 
I like the song on a whole. You need to bring out some more clarity and some things in the higher range. A lot of mids and lows in the song.
If you were to duplicate the acoustic guitar lines an octave higher or on a keyboard it would help carry it along.

But what the hell do I know?

Kah-nee
 
Kah-nee said:
I like the song on a whole. You need to bring out some more clarity and some things in the higher range. A lot of mids and lows in the song.
If you were to duplicate the acoustic guitar lines an octave higher or on a keyboard it would help carry it along.

But what the hell do I know?

Kah-nee
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I'm cracking up! I agree with you. It has a lot of 'mud' in it. We tried to cut back the bass and mids, but not enough apparently. We mixed this in an apartment living room, and I'm pretty sure that has affected our ability to get the levels of high, mid, and lows evened out. It shows.

There are actually two guitars in there with difference voicings.

Thanks,
J
 
I think the song has potential. I really like the verses, nice melody and interesting chord progression. But the chorus (or 'B' section in this case) is a big letdown. I kept waiting for a hook, but it just droned on and on with the same rhythm as the verses (only less interesting).

From a tracking and engineering perspective, well, it sounds a little amatuer to me. The acoustic guitar sounds like it was recorded direct, and I hate that piezo sound! It sounds as if it was recorded live, and the timing is a little shaky in some parts. I agree with Jake in that it probably should be re-recorded. It's not polished enough for prime-time.

Thanks for sharing...
 
DC-XPL:

Thanks for the honest feedback.

Just to be sure, which part would you consider to be the chorus? the part that repeats twice, or the part that occurs once, which is the bridge:

"platonic chair, visions explode into the air
you are a child, the sound of rain begins its prayer"

I wasn't there when the guitarist laid his tracks, but you're probably correct on the ac. gtr. One other issue we had was that we could not get the Marshal stack up 4 flights of stairs to the apartment we recorded it in, since the guitarist had just had a hernia operation. Ideally it would have a full gronk sound in the elect. guitar. We'll do that the next time we track it.
J
 
I heard the chorus, or B section, first come in around 50 seconds into the tune and it repeats twice. I heard "platonic chair..." as it was intended - as the bridge.

But I guess that's the point. In a great pop song, you don't need to go looking for the chorus - it hits you over the head. That's what this song is missing.
 
Foo Fighters?

Are you a fan? It sounds like it...
Me too - I like the song.

The mix does need some work.
Everything sounds a little disjointed << (no extra charge for the technical term)
The kit needs work: I can't hear the kick at all and all I can hear from the snare is the stick hitting the head.

The bass line is nice but it sounds like it's "out" at times.

You may want to retrack. It's worth it for sure it's a good song.
 
shookiejones said:
Are you a fan? It sounds like it...
Me too - I like the song.

The mix does need some work.
Everything sounds a little disjointed << (no extra charge for the technical term)
The kit needs work: I can't hear the kick at all and all I can hear from the snare is the stick hitting the head.

The bass line is nice but it sounds like it's "out" at times.

You may want to retrack. It's worth it for sure it's a good song.
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Well, I didn't like the Foo Fighters til I saw them play on SNL. They were a good hot tight band. We are coming from the same place as they are definitely.

Just not as polished!!! Hahaha. or Rich!!!!
 
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