OK. As long as critics are HIGHLY appreciated... (you asked for it)
Alright... I don't mind the song... I think it has potential. I thought the intro was a tad bit drawn out, though. Both of those are purely subjective taste, though.
The performances weren't bad... I thought the drumming was good and tight. The lead git was a little sloppy. The rhythm gits seemed fairly consistent. I think SC mentioned the BGV's because, well... they were kinda bad. You aren't holding that note very well at all, and it's really kinda distracting. I don't mind the lead vox, some straining going on and a couple mild flatties, but not bad.
The recording, on the other hand... needs a
lot of work. Every element has very "low-grade" sonic quality. The whole over-all mix has a very mid-ish quality to it,... no brightness, and almost no "low" presence (except for the dull "thump" of the kick drum) The drums are
very over-compressed (or very poorly tracked, or both.
) The high-hat has had the life squeezed out of it. The kick drum (as mentioned) is a very innocuous, dull "thump". The snare has been castrated. The only element of the drums that has any life left in it is the ride bell. Also, the gits are very mid-rangey.
Now... having said that. There's plenty you can do to improve this. If you don't want to retrack too much, you can try doubling the gits to see if you can get a better stereo presence, and doing some EQ'ing on them to try to get a bit more life into them. For every element of the drums, I recommend laying
way off on the compression... let them breathe a little, cause most of them are dyin' of suffocation.
I don't know that the kick can be helped much, because that sounds like the result of the mic that was used to track it. Try putting the kit in a "room". Bus the drum tracks to an aux and use some strategic reverb to make them sound like they have an environment (note the word "strategic"
You don't want to make it sound like they're on another planet, you just want a little resonance goin' on, and right now, they have no resonance at all). The BGV's have to go (unless you plan on autotuning them back into shape). Double or triple those... sing the same part multiple times and layer it (preferably with a decent stereo image)... and nail that note dead-on. That will make the BGV's into a nice "bed" that the chorus sits on. I don't know what interface you use to record... but if you use a computer, then I highly recommend vocal comp'ing. Track the main vox at least three or four times (I usually do at least five) and then pick the best phrases from each take and make one main vox track. And consider adding a second rhythm git track... maybe alternate the chording patterns and, then you can get a more "full" bed of gits to use in the chorus. After that, make sure you do some EQ'ing on the over-all mix... I was able to get a bit more life out of this mix just by EQ'ing it in my mp3 player.
That's aboot all I gots. Take it for what it's worth... (which ain't much)
WATYF