New Original Song - Crematory - Opinions?

[JasonBird]

hey there, here is a tune that our guitarist came up with....he recorded it at home with a drum machine, and he did the guitar, vox, and bass. It needs some work still , but i think it will be a cool song!! Check it out if you like! thanks,

JasonBird

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=2169&alid=-1

Crematory

 

[rayc]

You ought to post this in the Songwriting forum.
Neverthless, The demoness of this recording makes it sound early Black Sabbath - a good thing if you can keep it - not the drum machine though.
Cream - a - tory?
Isn't is crem - a -tor - y?
The melody works well with the backing, the lyrics are a little comical/noneventish but I assume they are meant to be tongue in cheek.
Go and record a demo of it with the band & work on the pronounciation.

 

[XLR]

I like the song and the performance. The mix is kind of hot in the 100-200 Hz range.

 

[JasonBird]

thanks for the responses,
The lyrics are a little on the way side, that's what we came up with in two hours. We'll take a Sabbath resemblence any day!! Thanks. We've got to learn the song and then we'll repost afterwards..thanks again!

JasonBird