My New Song, "Self-Arising Failure" What do you think of it?

[cpmusick]

I have recorded and uploaded a new song, which I am very proud of. It's titled "Self-Arising Failure".

DESCRIPTION: This is a song that has to deal with defeating someone who brings on an necessary fight, which is with someone who responds to finish it once and for all. The solid drum beat, low rumbling bass, acoustic tremolo guitar, combined with the distortion of the chorus guitars, all give this song a really unique and catchy sound. In the last half of the song, the addition of creepy sounding background synthesizer adds a much greater depth to it.

DOWNLOAD (direct link): -Download "Self-Arising Failure"-

DOWNLOAD (via my website): -Download From Website-

Also, if you would like to, you can visit my website to check out my other songs:
-Visit the Website of Ingenious Mastermind-

 

[cpmusick]

No one wants to comment?

 

[cpmusick]

****bump****

 

[cpmusick]

Surely there's someone who is interested in leaving some sort of reply?

 

[ido1957]

cpmusick - I like the background music in this. The lyrics are also very powerful.

But I'm not keen on the vocals.I think they could use a bit more work.

They tend to be a bit pitchy at times, which is more noticeable because of the melody line you've written.

I find the melody line is hard to follow, it seems the steps between notes is either too big or too small (that probably makes no sense but that's how it feels to me).

If you could smooth out the vocals and make the melody more pleasing this would be a better tune.

 

[jpw23]

No one wants to comment?

I think that the lack of comments might be due too havibg to download the song........a lot of folks prefer streaming! Just my .02 cents worth!

 

[danny83]

cpmusick - I like the background music in this. The lyrics are also very powerful.

But I'm not keen on the vocals.I think they could use a bit more work.

They tend to be a bit pitchy at times, which is more noticeable because of the melody line you've written.

I find the melody line is hard to follow, it seems the steps between notes is either too big or too small (that probably makes no sense but that's how it feels to me).

If you could smooth out the vocals and make the melody more pleasing this would be a better tune.

I agree with this 100%

Good background music, just work on those vocals and the melody...it does get a little hard to follow.

I can hear some System of Down style in this...are they one of your inspirations?

 

[cpmusick]

Thanks for the suggestions and comments. I'll work a bit more on the vocals. And yes, System of a Down is one of my biggest inspirations for me and my music.

 

[arsenaultk9]

The melodies of the song are good and the riff also, maybe abit to mutch note variation in chorus, but in general melodies are good and catchy. I think you're song weakest point is the tonal aspect, but I guess you can't argue on tone since people don't all like the same tones. But thought pretty catchy song

 

[cpmusick]

Thanks for the comments.

I have a profile on Garageband.com now, so if you would prefer to, you can stream the file. Here's the link:

http://www.garageband.com/song?|pe1|S8LTM0LdsaSlYlOwYWg

 

[rayc]

I really like the lo fi guitar but the drum track is way too crisp in comparison and a bit too busy in the panning dept.
The lyrics sound good too BUT you need to spend some time focussing on pitch. There are elements of David Byrne onm the 1st 2 T/Heads LPs in your delivery but it doesn't quite work.