my new song - a piece of land , what do you think?

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Very cool. I like the production style, but I think I would have liked a thicker bottom end in this song.

The high-passed backing vox might be a tad high in the mix at times, and I think they'd mesh better with the main vocal line if they were a bit lower.

The vocal style in general is not going to be for everybody, but I liked it. It has kind of a loose feel to it, along the lines of The Flaming Lips or perhaps Grandaddy. Cool stuff.
 
Most of the times the backup vocals (which sound cool, by the way, but...) start, there's a really loud, wet smack. I'm not sure if that's just the vocalist breathing, or a lip smack, or both, but it's quite distracting.

Other than that, I like it. The instruments sound good. You've got a soothing groove thing going on. The vocalist's voice sounds good. The effects are cool. The "Today"-esque lead guitar is always good.
 
Not bad. Mix sounds good to me, I use that vocal effect a lot, it's tough to get it right with the sibilance, I'd lower it a little on the high end, either eq it or use a multi-band compressor on it.

Good song though, I like the cut in the drums at the end. If they're digital, I'd say change the sound of the bass drum, but that's stylistic preference.

Nice job.
 
thank you all, I gave it another listen and I really should fix the backing vocals issue.
about the main vocal (sss and breath) , I did it on purpose ^_^ I like the sound of it, the slow singing, I want the mix to be **** and close if you know what I mean
I turned up the gain and sang close to the mic and of course with a tube
 
As far as my taste in music go, it's a little too emo for me. Good, but not my thing; you do it well. The recording is quite interesting. The acoustic guitar and lead/backwards electric bits are cool. The lack of bass though makes the "spiky" quality of the vox more apparent in my view.

There's a thread debating using the use of reverb on bass and kick drum on the site and this could be my example of why I don't like reverb on the kick. Just a over washy sound that makes the sample sound even more like a sample.

The lyrics, emotional vocals and production details (backwards cymbal, etc.) are all good efforts. With some bass and remixing the tune would be cool IMO.
 
Song is pretty good for its genre. Very nicely recorded too, love the vocal effects. I'm listening an cheap phones and can hear the bass pretty well, seems to have enough low end. Nice job!

Joey :):):):)
 
Sheesh you guys are so talented I just want to slip under a wet rock and cry.

Ziv I am listening to "A Piece Of Land" for maybe the tenth time. It sounds great. I am curious how people react when you perform the song for them.

I like the vocals. Nice harmonies. Sounds original.
 
Yeah, this is a good song, you just need to go up on those vocal and make them more upfront a bit. They're hard to listen to and that sucks because you have a good melody going there!

I would personally redo the lead vocals and sing the heck out of that melody.
 
*BLUSH* hehe

thank you all guys, I need to redo the lead vocals but if you wanna hear the song live in the studio - http://www.flowwithme.com
were not a band - its only me
im listening to this over and over and every feedback I got from you so far
turned to be right and constructive, I thank you all again
 
The only thing playing down low it the bass drum and it's reverb tail. I can't hear and bass guitar or note sounds at all...listening with mixing phones.

It's a really bright mix..not a bad thing...I like it; but, if there is a bass guitar, I'd major jack it up, and kill off a lot of the verb on the BD to avoid mud ...during the verses, anyway.

I agree that the vox is tweaked a bit too much in the harsh zone, or rolled off too much in the muddy midsection. A little more ...not much...meat and pataytahs on it would sound nice, I think.

I like the progression...a repeating non-diatonic, temporary 'modulation'. But a deviation from it every four or eight or 12 cycles, eg, would give it more continued interest to the ear. It's a good feature...but it wears out its welcome by being used so consistantly.

Other than that, I can hear a lot of great potential...in the tune, and in your general sound-vision. Very modern. Catchy.
 
Nice

HH seemed panned to far to the right.

Ending after, 4:09 not to my taste

Overall i did like the flow.

Nice job
 
thank you all this is the best forum ever
ill update to the new version soon!
 
I really like this song. The chorus is almost catchy enough to be pop, but the chord structure doesn't ever let it get trite or cliched. I'm not experienced enough to point out individual tweaks, but this almost sounds commercially produced. Very good work.
 
I didn't read everyone's replies to know if this was already said, so forgive, if it was:
Listening again, while I write. Music is very polished, very smooth.
The heavy breath intakes distract from the overall feel of the song. I found myself hearing that more than the words, which were hard to understand in some spots. I noticed a bit of pop at the end of "asleep".
The effects and panning on the musical interlude are very cool.
I love what you did with your harmonies. Great job.
Lyric suggestion: The beginning few words of the verses (not the chorus) seem crowded, and difficult to get out. Could you pare them down a just a bit? I think it would gel better with the rest of the song.
I love the part where the music backs off for "squash with your tiny fit, and", and the backing vocal technique comes forward - very nice accent affect!
 
I think the casual listener will just groove with this because it sounds like someone who hasn’t got a damn thing to do but strum a guitar and sing. I mean it really has a nice easy unrushed quality to it that I like to hear in songs.

Personally I’d like to be able to understand the words, not crazy about the noise fx on the vox. Your natural voice sounds real nice and all the other voices not only distract me but kind of imply you’re a whack-o, hearing voices and all. But if that’s what you intended then well done. Maybe if I understood the words I’d make more sense. Maybe not.

What did you use for recording this? Logic?
 
This is a cool arrangement and well captured :). Pretty bright overall, but not necessarily too much. Liking the way all the instrumentation is spread out and there are some cool FX in there.

The lead vocal sounds nice, but I agree with someone else that all of the FX and additional voices seem to distract from what otherwise could be a clearer, more focused presentation. More a taste thing than anything else I guess, but there you go;)

The more traditional sort of BGVs are really nice when they come in. Good job on this :).
 
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