My first track (ambient - electro - experimental), waiting your feedbacks !

[Toolc]

Hey this is my first track i finished (i'm practicing with my DAW for few months).
Feedbacks and advices are welcome !!

 

[DM60]

Bass has some rumble, you may want that. Not much to say on the mix as there is not much there.

Production notes if I may, I like the concept and the feeling of the song. Intro takes too long, I like the voice going from normal to low, but really needs to transition faster. Half of this song could be reduced in time and more musical elements added. I heard some clicking in the music (intentional), thought a clock sound would work really nice.

I wouldn't say it is finished, but just getting started. Really needs some expansion. Thanks for sharing.

 

[sammydix]

Agreed on the intro. It's a keeper, but it could be drastically shortened. I do like the atmosphere of the recording when the music kicks in, though.

 

[mjbphotos]

In the clip of the man's voice, there seems to be a little glitch at its start, might want to look at the waveform and edit it.

 

[Toolc]

In the clip of the man's voice, there seems to be a little glitch at its start, might want to look at the waveform and edit it.

Yeah this is because i wrapped it to put the syllabe on each beat maybe i could do it better.
A lot of people are telling me that the intro is too long but i like the idea that having time to get into the atmosphere of the song... Nonetheless i should make an other part in the middle more hard to go deeper in the progression. I'm thinking of an acceleration to 120bpm and bringing some more techno stuff then going back to the soft part at 110 bpm. I don't have so much time to do it but i keep it in mind.

Thank you all for your feedbacks, helps and please me a lot (and sorry for my english^^)

 

[TripleM]

Cool atmosphere. But I wanted it to "go somewhere." After the playing around with voice effects, it needs to do something more than what it does.

Little pop at :28.

 

[Toolc]

Cool atmosphere. But I wanted it to "go somewhere." After the playing around with voice effects, it needs to do something more than what it does.

Little pop at :28.

Thank you ! You are right i should add something in the middle, i'm working on something darker with the purpose of going deeper in the forest ^^. Well heard for the pop. It's because the sample is from 70's and the record is not very good.