Sounds a bit like some of my early twiddling the knobs and recording without having an outcome in mind. Some timing issues in the playing, some of the sounds are a bit garish when layered, and it would probably benefit from deviation from the monotonous pattern which currently exists. There are sounds which are easy to engage with, the thud sounds ok but a little full on and loses its novelty value quite quickly. It'll be interesting to see how it sounds with the lyrical options and how that might broaden the track's appeal. I appreciate there are those who like very repetitive, I can think of a couple of tracks with repetitive passages which I like a lot. The thing which makes those tracks stand out to me is the eventual variation or transition, they use high value tonal changes which draw upon a listener's emotive perception.
There are some great tracks in this part of the forum, perhaps have a listen and get an idea of how others approach putting a track together, maybe share a few thoughts of your own, it all adds insight and exposes a reader to a wealth of experience.
All the best, keep at it
Tim