Not that I'm one to talk, but there seems to be tracking issues, as well as the mixing. But I think under the harshness, you've got something pretty good.
I'll be honest - I didn't like the sound of the guitars at all. But I don't like a lot of that tapping stuff to begin with - and I don't like that glassy, flangy, etc type of guitar sound. But I do think there's a song there. And I really liked the vocal performance/style.
I'm surprised no one asked, but I will - what recording gear was used?
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