My best work yet..I think (2 Songs)

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I like both songs. The second song has kind of a Chevelle guitar sound to it. Very cool.
 
All Out
Hello Lee!
Good song.
Vocals are really well done & captured.
I like the bass definition but it lacks a little oomph down low.
Well done with the guitars.
Personally I think the vocals are a little too out front - but that's really amatter of personal taste rather than anything else - &, after all, you usually pull together tracks that are melodically strong so it'd be silly not to emphasise that aspect.
Great work.
 
Great tunes...fave parts were the vocals on the first and the guitar on the second...slick and professional :)
 
Thanks for the comments guys :) Especially the Chevelle reference, never thought about that one recording the guitars. i tend to use 311 as a baseline for guitars and it never seems to work out that way. Which is alright. :D


Ray, as always, good ears. I spent the entire day today like "what the hell, something is not right with the mix". And sure enough, the mix buss settings where off on a "spatial" plug-in that's supposed to add some slight ambience to the mix. It really ended up screwing with the mixes, so I took it off and sure enough...sounds right now.

The mixes are updated, should be a world-O-Difference. :D
 
Listening to All Out...
production sounds very good. Rythm guitars blend very nicely. Very good voice although not very aggressive which would go well with this sound. Nice work!

Joey :):):):)
 
Where do I send money that I may acquire your CD? :D

I'm really impressed by your stuff. I actually keep "Her Bones" and "My Song" in pretty heavy rotation on my playlists.

I like the lead guitar on Slide.

The only complaint I have on either of these songs is that I think the filtered voice on Slide could be moved closer to the center.
 
Really , really nice work, all around. Especially liked the: composition and arrangement; the qualities of the vox; the time-doubling and halving; the artsy and interesting pan ideas; and the delay bounce off the wall R.

If I were to suggest ways to make it better?

The second verse goes 4 {?} cycles, matching the first. It's kind of long and predictable like the first. I'd cut the second verse in half, and dive into the rest of the tune...a little surprise...and make it up later. And add about 4 to 12 bars of that nice guit 'solo' thing. Get it over 3 minutes...I don't hear air play that is under 3 , often.

The tune has good dynamics: breakdowns, the time trips. But someone mentioned the aggressiveness? The solo guitar break is that. But it goes away fast. It's like a little mountain of a flat plain. Some other features that would pleasingly clutter the landscape might be a couple BIG drum breaks; a vox section than screams and emotes a bit; and maybe a some edge on the guitars [EQ] in the R&L sections. Contrast.

Nothing wrong at all with the work. Just adding a few added chess pieces might make for a more attention-getting game. As it is, you're about 2 moves from 'mate'. For future reference?

As the tune stands, I know it'd sound wonderful live...full of power...making me move. But it doesnt come across a lot on the recording. "Bigness and pump and angst". If this is your band, I bet it would really , seriously ROCK, if done in a single recorded/ live take. Guts happen when you're in the midst of musical copulation in front of the mic's.

MHO. FWWIW. It's a bit "tame". It needs to get a little raw, unneccessary, with some livish "strut". All the parts are carefully controlled.....which, with a slightly more interesting landscape, would work. It needs a little "Ya ya".

But it is very, very good as it is. 9 out of 10
 
>away fast. It's like a little mountain of a flat plain. Some other features >that would pleasingly clutter the landscape might be a couple BIG drum >breaks; a vox section than screams and emotes a bit; and maybe a some >edge on the guitars [EQ] in the R&L sections. Contrast.

I have to agree with the post above, its a bit flat in the vocal melody and tame but besides that its a job well done.
 
Note...I'm critiquing by comparing with the best of the genre. You're planning to release this on a CD...spending lots of money, and it's serious business. So I'm being real serious....

Your record is really great. And 9 of 10 against the pro arrangers, performers and prodecers and engineers is way high marks!
 
Yeah...this sounds great.

Mix punch's nicely. Maybe a little too much vocal processing for my taste, but it really sounds great.

Kind of has a newer Green Day vibe to it, and a dash of Nick Hexum in the vocals. Good job!
 
jeffmaher said:
Really , really nice work, all around. Especially liked the: composition and arrangement; the qualities of the vox; the time-doubling and halving; the artsy and interesting pan ideas; and the delay bounce off the wall R.

If I were to suggest ways to make it better?

The second verse goes 4 {?} cycles, matching the first. It's kind of long and predictable like the first. I'd cut the second verse in half, and dive into the rest of the tune...a little surprise...and make it up later. And add about 4 to 12 bars of that nice guit 'solo' thing. Get it over 3 minutes...I don't hear air play that is under 3 , often.

The tune has good dynamics: breakdowns, the time trips. But someone mentioned the aggressiveness? The solo guitar break is that. But it goes away fast. It's like a little mountain of a flat plain. Some other features that would pleasingly clutter the landscape might be a couple BIG drum breaks; a vox section than screams and emotes a bit; and maybe a some edge on the guitars [EQ] in the R&L sections. Contrast.

Nothing wrong at all with the work. Just adding a few added chess pieces might make for a more attention-getting game. As it is, you're about 2 moves from 'mate'. For future reference?

As the tune stands, I know it'd sound wonderful live...full of power...making me move. But it doesnt come across a lot on the recording. "Bigness and pump and angst". If this is your band, I bet it would really , seriously ROCK, if done in a single recorded/ live take. Guts happen when you're in the midst of musical copulation in front of the mic's.

MHO. FWWIW. It's a bit "tame". It needs to get a little raw, unneccessary, with some livish "strut". All the parts are carefully controlled.....which, with a slightly more interesting landscape, would work. It needs a little "Ya ya".

But it is very, very good as it is. 9 out of 10
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wow! guys are killin me! :D In a good way, I promise. I'm very "House" (the TV show) about the musical puzzle, so you got my mental gears workin.

I always like the challenge and that important extra angle. And I understand what you're saying to the T. Bring it up to that final "heartfelt" level, possibly the hardest one of all. I've been listening to alot of character bands like Radiohead, trying to pull from that. They really come down with this infectious swing that I wish we could of done live here. Rather than the piecing/figuring things out as we go approach that we took.

In terms of the production, I really kind of hated the fact that this was put together kind of cookie cutter, the drums being put together over a few jam sessions to a click. Then building unknown songs from that. In the future, it's a no brainer for me to stick to live and rehearsed tracking, hopefully with more time to practice. The way it should of been. :D

I wanna sit on this really good response for a day or two, see what I can bring out of what I already have. I get very fixed when someone brings up a great point. I'm already thinking of how I could swap around the verses a bit, break up the monogamy a little. I'm thinking since I'm past the overdub opportunity just because of deadlines and budget, I'll see how I can try to apply a "best" bag of tricks from what I already have. Maybe pull out some type of sound design aspect.

The post means alot guys! :)

Let me see if I can come back with something that picks at the brain a little more abstractly.
 
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