Murder at the Drive-In - Greg_L homicidal original idiocy

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Here's a new original. Just finished. Tear it up. :spank:

Murder at the Drive-In
http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/file.php?id=25841

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There once was a girl I knew
Blue eyes and a ponytail
And when she wore her saddle shoes
I knew I couldn't fail
I had to find out if
She'd be interested in
Just having fun and hanging out
At the drive-in

I tried to hold her hand
Tried to make her understand
I wanted to be with her all night
And when she told me no
I knew she had to go
She didn't even put up a fight

Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Oh yeah there was a murder at the drive-in, oh yeah

We pulled in and found a spot
And she was looking great
The stars were out the night was hot
I didn't hesitate
I couldn't stall the girl no more
Turned up the radio
Reached over and I locked her door
And wrapped my hands around her throat

I tried to hold her hand
Tried to make her understand
I wanted to be with her all night
And when she told me no
I knew she had to go
She didn't even put up a fight

Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Oh yeah there was a murder at the drive-in, oh yeah

Poor girl, she's gone, and now, I got her all to myself!

And now I'm happy as can be
With her dead body next to me
I got the girl of my dreams
And she didn't even scream
I kiss her skin I stroke her hair
It let's her know that I care
I see her whenever I want
I keep her safe inside my trunk

I tried to hold her hand
Tried to make her understand
I wanted to be with her all night
And when she told me no
I knew she had to go
She didn't even put up a fight

Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
Oh yeah there was a murder at the drive-in, oh yeah
We were watching the Breakfast Club, oh yeah
Oh yeah, we fell in love...
At the drive-in
 
I liked the song alot. My only caveat would be that I read the lyrics first and was expecting dirtier, less produced punk ala The Misfits. similar style, but you just did too good of a job recording/mixing! I will probably listen to the song a few more time today just cuz i like it that much!
 
cool ......... sounds like something from Grease.

If Olivia Newton John was the murdered girl it'd be perfect.

Nice job recording, playing and mixing as usual.
 
yay...another roller coaster ride for my ears! Lyrics are dark, but fun...I like the irony of the violent story being expressed in this upbeat happy sounding tune. Guitars, bass, drums, vocals (lead and backing) all sound perfectly balanced.

The ending is really good....bass sounds especially good there.

I can't decide if I like the bridge or not. What I liked about it was the change in tempo...and the "almost" kinda church-like feel....like it's a memorial service for the "poor girl"....and then, Surprise!!...the same selfish asshole comes right back out! I think I would have liked the bridge better if it was just a tad longer though...to allow the apologetic fake-out more time to sink in before the aforementioned asshole comes back. You're probably gonna to poke my eyes out now for trying to tinker with the bridge...BUT...I would suggest making the bridge a little longer by singing "poor girl, she's gone, how sad, so wrong....poor girl, oh well, and now...I got her all to myself"

Great song though!
 
Im really enjoying your "new" sound....polished and poppy (no offense)..I could almost hear horns in here and a So Cal surf punk/ska thing going on..great vocals, solo tone perfect

I think you've taken your productions to a new level mate, this is pro... I dont think everyone will like it but I think its gonna give you more leeway to experiment and widens your potential audience
 
Tony-bobs said:
I liked the song alot. My only caveat would be that I read the lyrics first and was expecting dirtier, less produced punk ala The Misfits. similar style, but you just did too good of a job recording/mixing! I will probably listen to the song a few more time today just cuz i like it that much!
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Thanks. I totally love me some Misfits and all of their stuff, but I'm trying to make good mixes. :D

Lt. Bob said:
cool ......... sounds like something from Grease.

If Olivia Newton John was the murdered girl it'd be perfect.

Nice job recording, playing and mixing as usual.
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Thanks Boob. I did try for a 50's kind of punkabilly type sound, so yeah, I guess that could be Grease-like. :laughings:

sharonclowe said:
yay...another roller coaster ride for my ears! Lyrics are dark, but fun...I like the irony of the violent story being expressed in this upbeat happy sounding tune. Guitars, bass, drums, vocals (lead and backing) all sound perfectly balanced.

The ending is really good....bass sounds especially good there.

I can't decide if I like the bridge or not. What I liked about it was the change in tempo...and the "almost" kinda church-like feel....like it's a memorial service for the "poor girl"....and then, Surprise!!...the same selfish asshole comes right back out! I think I would have liked the bridge better if it was just a tad longer though...to allow the apologetic fake-out more time to sink in before the aforementioned asshole comes back. You're probably gonna to poke my eyes out now for trying to tinker with the bridge...BUT...I would suggest making the bridge a little longer by singing "poor girl, she's gone, how sad, so wrong....poor girl, oh well, and now...I got her all to myself"

Great song though!
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Thanks sharon. I did intentionally aim for a happy fun kind of song against the evil lyrics, so I'm glad that came across. I'm not changing the bridge though. It is what it is. That part was a last-minute afterthought anyway. ;)

PDP said:
Reminds me of this:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sPLJBMjD6fA


:laughings:
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Um, okay. I don't get it, but whatever. :confused:

kcearl said:
Im really enjoying your "new" sound....polished and poppy (no offense)..I could almost hear horns in here and a So Cal surf punk/ska thing going on..great vocals, solo tone perfect

I think you've taken your productions to a new level mate, this is pro... I dont think everyone will like it but I think its gonna give you more leeway to experiment and widens your potential audience
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Thanks kc. I'm enjoying the new sound too. It's different from my other stuff, but not drastically different. The songs are still as dumb as ever. :D
 
Real good mix. I liked the song. Great hooks.

Only nit is I'm catching some pitchiness on a couple of words. The word "out" at :41 sounds a little sharp to my ear. A couple of other spots.

Love the bass part.
 
Tear it up he says.......:rolleyes:
and how are we expected to do that???:mad: It's too fuckin' perfect......!
A lighter touch of necrophilia and perversion, good subjects to write about.....
Another great tune and recording and that's all!:D
 
What a touching love song! It takes me back to my youth, when I couldn't get laid with a fistful of money and tickets to prom! :D (thank goodness I learned how to play guitar, I coulda wound up like that 'aforementioned asshole' :eek:)

Dear Greg: I hate cymbals! I hate mixing them, I hate listening to them. I like yours. What gives? (let's pretend I had real drums).

Yours Truly,

:D:cool::drunk:
 
TripleM said:
Real good mix. I liked the song. Great hooks.

Only nit is I'm catching some pitchiness on a couple of words. The word "out" at :41 sounds a little sharp to my ear. A couple of other spots.

Love the bass part.
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Thanks a lot dude. I'm no singer and don't put much effort into it, so if pitch problems are the worst you came up with, then I can live with that. :D

dewhitt said:
This simply rocks. I can't think of a single thing I would change. Damn, dude...whatever you are doing, it's working!

Best Regards,

Dave DeWhitt
http://www.soundclick.com/davedewhitt
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Thanks Dave. :D

joeym said:
Tear it up he says.......:rolleyes:
and how are we expected to do that???:mad: It's too fuckin' perfect......!
A lighter touch of necrophilia and perversion, good subjects to write about.....
Another great tune and recording and that's all!:D
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Thanks a lot Joey. :D :D

maximusbs said:
What a touching love song! It takes me back to my youth, when I couldn't get laid with a fistful of money and tickets to prom! :D (thank goodness I learned how to play guitar, I coulda wound up like that 'aforementioned asshole' :eek:)

Dear Greg: I hate cymbals! I hate mixing them, I hate listening to them. I like yours. What gives? (let's pretend I had real drums).

Yours Truly,

:D:cool::drunk:
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If you had real drums and cymbals, you might not hate cymbals so much. The worst part of drum machines or programmed drums are the cymbals. They just about always suck. They can give you ten million kit and drum choices, but they still have yet to figure out how to make their cymbal samples not sound stupid. ;)

Thanks though! :D
 
Another really good mix.

The background vox could probably come down in a few places. They're loud enough that they start to detract from the melody.

As an artistic thing, I might change the title. The first verse builds up this sappy, 50s love song and then surprises you with the murder, but the title kind of spoils it.
 
VomitHatSteve said:
Another really good mix.

The background vox could probably come down in a few places. They're loud enough that they start to detract from the melody.

As an artistic thing, I might change the title. The first verse builds up this sappy, 50s love song and then surprises you with the murder, but the title kind of spoils it.
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Thanks dude. Good call on the title change.
 
I love the lyrics! Reminds me of the Misfits meets the Dead Milkmen!

They go well with the poppy punk feel of the song.
 
I would take a second look at the upper mids. I know the mids are boosted in the guitar to get a more "retro" tone but Im also hearing the same mids in the toms and in the bass drum which all together is creating a spike in the upper mids. I dont know, say about 600hz and 800hz. My monitors smoothed this out but it was apparent on my computer speakers. Either way nice little morbid tune.
 
CODE BLUE!

Great tune, great mix. To echo what others have said, it definitely sounds pro. I'm sure I wouldn't be the only one interested in seeing a quick and dirty overview of your recording process if you ever have the time.
 
Love your bass playing on this...song is great (as usual) that little part around :55 is tight!
 
gregsk777 said:
I love the lyrics! Reminds me of the Misfits meets the Dead Milkmen!

They go well with the poppy punk feel of the song.
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Cool, thanks. :D

jghungerford said:
I would take a second look at the upper mids. I know the mids are boosted in the guitar to get a more "retro" tone but Im also hearing the same mids in the toms and in the bass drum which all together is creating a spike in the upper mids. I dont know, say about 600hz and 800hz. My monitors smoothed this out but it was apparent on my computer speakers. Either way nice little morbid tune.
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Thanks dude. It seems pretty balanced to me on everything I listened on. If anything, the low mids might be a little slushy on certain systems I referenced. I didn't try computer speakers though. Thanks for the feedback. :)

DogmaticVox said:
CODE BLUE!

Great tune, great mix. To echo what others have said, it definitely sounds pro. I'm sure I wouldn't be the only one interested in seeing a quick and dirty overview of your recording process if you ever have the time.
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Thanks. There's not much to tell. Do you have any specific questions?

queepy said:
Love your bass playing on this...song is great (as usual) that little part around :55 is tight!
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Thanks man. :)
 
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