I have never done this before (shown a lyric before I felt it was "done") but thought I would give it a try and see if I could get some help from the good people here. All advice appreciated!
I have been working on this one for a while and, while I like some of it, I feel that something is wrong and can't quite put my finger on it. See what you think.
I have some music, and it fits in the contemporary genre I guess. However, that could change at this stage.
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Japanese tattoo and a schoolyard smile
A sparkle in her eye that says it’s been worthwhile
It’s getting kind of late
She’s really got to go
French cigarettes and cheap perfume
The scent of night in a rented room
But it’s getting kind of late
And she’s really got to go
Diamante earrings
Faded jeans
The skin of a woman still in her teens
I don't want to say good night
I want her to make things right
And I want her to take some time
And spend that time with me
Soft surrender, sweet surprise
Telling all these pretty lies
Just to make her take some time
And spend that time with me
The night is cold and I need somebody to cling to
I’m sinking fast and I need somebody to cling to
I know it's late but I need somebody to cling to
The world's too fast, I need somebody to cling to
She says she sees through me, I say “What do you see?”
She says she sees some kind of good in me
Well, I just mouth some obscenity.. and laugh, ha! ha!
A smart-mouthed kid with a nightclub tan
I need her to make me a better man
With a sense of purpose and a battle plan – uh-huh
Diamante earrings
Faded jeans
Never says what she really means
I don't want to say good night
I want her to make things right
I want her to take some time
And spend that time with me
Soft surrender, sweet surprise
Look into her pretty eyes
Try to make her take some time
And spend that time with me
The night is cold and I need somebody to cling to
I’m sinking fast and I need somebody to cling to
I know it's late but I need somebody to cling to
The world's too fast, I need somebody to cling to
Japanese tattoo
Schoolyard smile
Sparkle in her eye
Been worthwhile
It's getting kind of late..
It's getting kind of late..
It's getting kind of late
Thanks for your help
I have been working on this one for a while and, while I like some of it, I feel that something is wrong and can't quite put my finger on it. See what you think.
I have some music, and it fits in the contemporary genre I guess. However, that could change at this stage.
#Untitled
Japanese tattoo and a schoolyard smile
A sparkle in her eye that says it’s been worthwhile
It’s getting kind of late
She’s really got to go
French cigarettes and cheap perfume
The scent of night in a rented room
But it’s getting kind of late
And she’s really got to go
Diamante earrings
Faded jeans
The skin of a woman still in her teens
I don't want to say good night
I want her to make things right
And I want her to take some time
And spend that time with me
Soft surrender, sweet surprise
Telling all these pretty lies
Just to make her take some time
And spend that time with me
The night is cold and I need somebody to cling to
I’m sinking fast and I need somebody to cling to
I know it's late but I need somebody to cling to
The world's too fast, I need somebody to cling to
She says she sees through me, I say “What do you see?”
She says she sees some kind of good in me
Well, I just mouth some obscenity.. and laugh, ha! ha!
A smart-mouthed kid with a nightclub tan
I need her to make me a better man
With a sense of purpose and a battle plan – uh-huh
Diamante earrings
Faded jeans
Never says what she really means
I don't want to say good night
I want her to make things right
I want her to take some time
And spend that time with me
Soft surrender, sweet surprise
Look into her pretty eyes
Try to make her take some time
And spend that time with me
The night is cold and I need somebody to cling to
I’m sinking fast and I need somebody to cling to
I know it's late but I need somebody to cling to
The world's too fast, I need somebody to cling to
Japanese tattoo
Schoolyard smile
Sparkle in her eye
Been worthwhile
It's getting kind of late..
It's getting kind of late..
It's getting kind of late
Thanks for your help