Looking for feedback on this one....

[Big Jinx]

In the middle of my first solo album/mixtape and looking for feedback on a song idea below. Putting another one of my mcees on it with me. Thanks for the look and feed fellas-

http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=5738352&q=hi

 

[Fieva]

The hook is weak IMO homie. Needs more creativeness and some more color added into it. It sounds dull and doesn't present the message the way you're probably intending it to. My suggestion if you want to leave the hook as it is, have someone singing in the background to give it extra presence, preferably a male who can do some Nate Dogg type ish without sounding exactly like Nate Dogg.

The lyrics could work with the beat, parts of the vocal mix could be better though. Mainly your adlib tracks.

Beat is on point.

Fiev.

 

[gullyjewelz]

The beat is definitely right! I like the delivery on the hook - maybe the actual lyrics being said could be revised for . . . just a "tighter" or better words - i like flow of the hook ( the way it matches the music is mad cool!!!) but the words aren't as clever as the verse . . . the verse and the music is DEFINITE, thoguh!!!!