Well - let's see here -
Melodically speaking it was a bit too intense for me - the rapid delivery of the lyrics made it difficult to understand the form - this is not your typical A-B-A, I know, but there could be a moe pronounced break between sections - my tastes only, you understand. The orchestral sweeps were terrific! Are those samples or did you record this with real strings? Difficult for me to tell. Again, the tymps were too loud - that's the second occurrence this week with tympani - I guess they're difficult to mix. The sounds were excellent (hi tymp slightly out of tune) and I'm inspired to have a shot at recording some. How did you fit the tymps into your studio? (I know they're real because of the tuning issue.)
From a mix standpoint those are my only comments. I know we shouldn't be too concerned here with thematic content or lyrical content but I'd be remiss if I didn't mention the existentialist theme that pervades the piece - it's just too heavy for unenlightened tastes. I'm sure others will echo this sentiment in subsequent posts.
Nice work - well conceived - thoughtfully delivered - I enjoyed it.
Milan