Sounds nice! I like the mood created by the vocals against the music. The drums sound great but yeah i agree they sound almost too distinct and upfront, like a real drummer might layout naturally during the verses so you can really hear the words and pick it up as the music gets louder, maybe turning up the vocals would accomplish the same thing but i think you're really close to making this sound like a live take which is a great accomplishment. There's some great lyric lines in there, i just had to work hard to hear them! Guitars and bass sound well balanced, I think something taking the lead in the end jam might be interesting?