what up dude?!
well i'm a huge JJ fan, and i do think this sounds a lot like him, but that's all good because there's a lot of people who try like hell to sound like him (and i'm not saying you're one of them) and fail. this does sounds like something he'd write.
as you know, this recording quality is craptacular, but the song is cool and i think your voice sounds fine for it. that drum loop doesn't sound right for this song at all. it's good to keep your tempo, but it doesn't quite sound right with this feel of this. if you have other beats, or can program your own, i'd suggest making one yourself.
this song does sound a little long, and maybe it's the monotony of the the verses and choruses...they sound good together, but a little goes a long way.
anyway, i think this does sound cool. get yourself some cheap recording stuff and do this puppy some justice. i'd like to hear some of your other stuff if you have other tunes.
cheers!
tait
bag of toys