403 error, I'm not allowed to hear.
Sorry about that, I just moved to a Linux server (from Windows), and it's a lot pickier about getting your URLs exactly right (capitals, escaped spaces, etc.)
I've got a
new version up, taking into everyone's recommendations as seemed appropriate.
I brought the lead vocals up a bit.
I brought the backup vocals down in a few places.
I completely cut some guitars and backup vocals in some places to add more contrast and variety through the song.
I brought the drums up, especially the synth drums (which sound the way I want them to, unlike the real ones.

), and I eq'd the analog drums much higher in the low end and lower in the middle.
I decreased the frequencies Teysha suggested on the rhythm guitars and increased the ones you suggested on the lead guitar.
I panned most things a little farther out.
I EQ'd the synth to be a little less harsh.
Hopefully, it works a little better now!
Thanks so much for your input everyone.
In case anyone is concerned since it's not in the tab, the "female" vocals are Yamaha's Vocaloid, and they're singing...
Bang your head with me, and rock out with me.
Bang your head with me now.
Bang your head with me. You won't surprise me.
Bang your head with me now. Ah ah aah.
Bang your head with me, and rock out with me.
Bang your head with me now.
Bang your head with me. We all will be free.
Bang your head with me.