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zed32 said:
it's not supposed to be easy, kid.

I didn't expect it to be easy, but that's as hard as I've tried in any song, and it's not good? I don't know what to do...

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Re-Lapse said:
Nah, I just listened to your stuff. You're good, and know what you're talking about. But I'm not even kidding, I tried my hardest on that 2nd drop, and it's still not good? I dont' get it.. I dont' see what I'm doing wrong...I don't want to give up because I love music so much, but when someone of your status doesn't like my stuff it makes me feel like I might as well just drop the bomb and leave it to you people who know what you're doing.

I wish a vibe would just go through my body and I'd flow and feel good about it, and make a decent song. I don't want to torture you, but would you please click my Website link in my Sig. and click downloads, and tell me if you like _any_ of them on there? Seriously, if none of them are good, I have a _lot_ of work to do. Please, let me know.

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Look homie, you ain't gonna be dope overnight. You been on here for like a month, and you're already showing progress. You have potential, you just can't expect to become Eminem overnight. Matter of fact... download some old eminem stuff, and some old Pac stuff, and old Biggie stuff... WuTang, Rakim, A Tribe Called Quest... Study the greats, and take pieces from each of them. Don't bite them, just take elements of what you hear, and build your own style.

If it was as easy as your hoping it would be, all of us would be millionaires right now.
 
Change of POETS said:
Look homie, you ain't gonna be dope overnight. You been on here for like a month, and you're already showing progress. You have potential, you just can't expect to become Eminem overnight. Matter of fact... download some old eminem stuff, and some old Pac stuff, and old Biggie stuff... WuTang, Rakim, A Tribe Called Quest... Study the greats, and take pieces from each of them. Don't bite them, just take elements of what you hear, and build your own style.

If it was as easy as your hoping it would be, all of us would be millionaires right now.

I didn't expect it to be easy, I knew it was going to be hard. Sure I've only been here under THIS alias for a month. But I've been attempting to rap for a year or so...and I don't see any progression, ok well a little, but not enough to make a huge deal of it. What do you do when you like something you did, but others don't? I mean, I like what I did there, I like the way the words flowed and worked out, but you guys don't.. Does that mean I should change it just because two people out of a billion don't like it, no. But that does mean next time I make a song, to take it into account what you had to say. I'm going to keep trying, and keep getting better. I promise.

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you are a lot better than the first thing you posted. keep making beats too, because the ones i heard you make were pretty good. i actually haven't had a chance to listen to your latest revision so i cant comment on it yet (i'm still at work), but nobody's trying to say its AWFUL or anything. it's always a work in progress, and if you like it, then there's a pretty good chance that someone else is gonna like it too. keep at it, keep making songs even if they're no good, just to have it under your belt you know? i'm sure eminem spent a lot of time i the studio working on songs that never saw the light of day, but you take some good things from every project that you undertake.
 
zed32 said:
you are a lot better than the first thing you posted. keep making beats too, because the ones i heard you make were pretty good. i actually haven't had a chance to listen to your latest revision so i cant comment on it yet (i'm still at work), but nobody's trying to say its AWFUL or anything. it's always a work in progress, and if you like it, then there's a pretty good chance that someone else is gonna like it too. keep at it, keep making songs even if they're no good, just to have it under your belt you know? i'm sure eminem spent a lot of time i the studio working on songs that never saw the light of day, but you take some good things from every project that you undertake.

Thank you zed. _THAT_ is what I wanted to hear. I appreciate your honesty, and I'm going to keep trying. :)

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Change of POETS said:
Look homie, you ain't gonna be dope overnight. You been on here for like a month, and you're already showing progress. You have potential, you just can't expect to become Eminem overnight. Matter of fact... download some old eminem stuff, and some old Pac stuff, and old Biggie stuff... WuTang, Rakim, A Tribe Called Quest... Study the greats, and take pieces from each of them. Don't bite them, just take elements of what you hear, and build your own style.

If it was as easy as your hoping it would be, all of us would be millionaires right now.


That's solid right there Change.

Re-Lapse, I'd listen to that one seriously. Take people who you listen to and then learn elements from them to incorporate your own sound. That's how I started honestly. You're more likely to find the best stuff IMO with older material. And keep in mind that there is a difference between using elements to craft and straight biting. We don't need to mention how many Pac biters still linger around in the industry and still get paid.
 
Fieva said:
That's solid right there Change.

Re-Lapse, I'd listen to that one seriously. Take people who you listen to and then learn elements from them to incorporate your own sound. That's how I started honestly. You're more likely to find the best stuff IMO with older material. And keep in mind that there is a difference between using elements to craft and straight biting. We don't need to mention how many Pac biters still linger around in the industry and still get paid.

I hear ya, I understand. I'm definitely trying to find my voice, and my way of writing. I know it's not at its best, and I know I can improve in a lot of aspects. I suppose I was probably having a bad day and a day that I shouldn't have asked for critique. Because I had a feeling it wasn't going to be the best. So, I'll continue on and do what I can do to make things better, and I'll continue on. But, as Change said in my other thread (New Beat!) I'm focusing on beat production for right now, until I can "nearly" master that, since I'm farther along that road than I am with rapping, that's the best thing I can do right now.

I'll continue writing, and rapping and I'm going to throw up a mix tape, but it isn't going to be anything spectacular nor sold for more than a buck a pop or somethin like that, until I really find myself worthy of more than that.

I appreciate everything you guys have done for me, from the days when I was known as "DjIce" to now, I really have improved and I owe it all to you guys, to be honest. Thanks :)

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take it from me kid...

i was exactly where you are now wen i was your age (only worst lol) and you won't really notice a change in your style till others notice a change in your style. best example is this in 3 months put in an old song 9like this one will be) and listen too it after you've recorded a whole rack of new material. the difference will not only be heard clearly but you'll probably get a really good laugh out of it, lord knows i did wen i listened to my first and second mixtapes wwooo wat was i doin HAHA!!
 
1st Delivery, sounds like you reading famo.
2nd- The phonish eq on your vox can grow boring after a while.
 
rnb259 said:
i was exactly where you are now wen i was your age (only worst lol) and you won't really notice a change in your style till others notice a change in your style. best example is this in 3 months put in an old song 9like this one will be) and listen too it after you've recorded a whole rack of new material. the difference will not only be heard clearly but you'll probably get a really good laugh out of it, lord knows i did wen i listened to my first and second mixtapes wwooo wat was i doin HAHA!!

Thanks, I'll continue on and work on it :)

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Killah_Trakz said:
1st Delivery, sounds like you reading famo.
2nd- The phonish eq on your vox can grow boring after a while.

Well...I have trouble memorizing the lyrics, do you have any advice?

and secondly, I don't know how to edit my vocals other than put an echo on it, any suggestions there?

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Some pointers... Music, especially rap, is based on rhythm. As far as I can tell you can't rap on one. You need to rap WITH the beat rather than over top of the beat. Your rhymes don't really ryhme all that creatively... or well. i.e. town:around:frown, right:night, night:right(again)... Try using words that your average 6 year old couldn't put together. If you think this is good rap you need to seriously raise your standards or get ready for a lifetime of having your shit hated on. I'm not trying to be an asshole but you need to know the truth without the sugar coating.

The props... Keep trying. If you really love it you will no matter what people tell you. Don't give up. But PLEASE, think about what you are trying to say. And then say it in a way that makes it unique to your view on life. What you posted was straight up shit as far as content goes. It was neither unique or anything *I* couldn't have written (I am certainly no rapper either). I know you're just starting but now comes the time to step up your game or deal with reality.

And the best lesson ever... DON'T EAT YOUR OWN BULLSHIT!!! be objective

Sorry I had to be THAT asshole. No disrespect meant. Just trying to keep you real. :o
 
mrT said:
Some pointers... Music, especially rap, is based on rhythm. As far as I can tell you can't rap on one. You need to rap WITH the beat rather than over top of the beat. Your rhymes don't really ryhme all that creatively... or well. i.e. town:around:frown, right:night, night:right(again)... Try using words that your average 6 year old couldn't put together. If you think this is good rap you need to seriously raise your standards or get ready for a lifetime of having your shit hated on. I'm not trying to be an asshole but you need to know the truth without the sugar coating.

The props... Keep trying. If you really love it you will no matter what people tell you. Don't give up. But PLEASE, think about what you are trying to say. And then say it in a way that makes it unique to your view on life. What you posted was straight up shit as far as content goes. It was neither unique or anything *I* couldn't have written (I am certainly no rapper either). I know you're just starting but now comes the time to step up your game or deal with reality.

And the best lesson ever... DON'T EAT YOUR OWN BULLSHIT!!! be objective

Sorry I had to be THAT asshole. No disrespect meant. Just trying to keep you real. :o

No disrespect taken, I know that that song wasn't good at all, but I'm also not trying to get rich off of rapping, I'm only trying to learn the tricks of the trade, and make decent music. I love it. I'm never going to quit, I can only improve. yes, I know my lyrics aren't the greatest, I'll work on that too, but for now my focus is beat production. Thanks for the comment :)

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