Hi, I'm New (a jolly intro electro-dreampop track)

[Forcefields]

There are lots of talented people here. I'm looking forward to joining the community, learning, and checking out your guy's tunes.

Here's a song I'm working on. I'm happy with most of it except the vocal line in general. It sounds a bit "cheeseball" in places so I'm considering have a female friend lay down a more soulful vocal line, perhaps with some vocoder thrown in. Any suggestions would be great as I've lost perspective on this one...

Thanks everyone!

 

[guitarboi89]

the vocals in the verse sound like the bloke from silverchair. With the vocal melody i dont like when you go down after a held note, it sounds odd to me.
With the cheesyness try using some different sourced samples, they pretty much sound from the same drum machine... perhaps a more raw snare sound.
Good song btw

 

[zed32]

very nice production. i can't see any faults with the mix really. the vocal layering on the chorus sounds awesome. not my type of music really, but i like it. the drums sound perfect for this type of song. anyway, good work!

 

[bigbubba]

The synth sounds real cool.

The drums sound just right kinda pop. May more crackle in the snare would be nice.

The band sounded like Duran Duran for a minute.

The doubled vox sounds cool.

The synth/bass might be a little too heavy in places. Makes my home theater rumble. Around 2:05 it sounds like bottom heavy.

Other than that it's nice.

The alternate snare sound pretty nice.

I wouldn't change the vox.

 

[Rohan]

I reckon this is seriously good
Mebbe have the vocals a bit more upfront in the chorus; sure try something different with your friend, but i like this a lot already, kind of New Order meets Boy George....
I didn't detect any cheese, but the again, there's nothing wrong with cheese.

 

[Greg_L]

Man, thats pretty well done. I don't know anything about synths and programmed drum samples and shit, so from a just listening perspective, I don't hear anything that seems out of place at all. The choruses sound really nice. Overall a damn fine job.