Copy the impact, copy the intensity of the vocal.
YouTube - Foo Fighters - Have A Cigar
I love the Foo Fighters, but prefer the Pink Floyd version.
I'm a Floyd guy myself. The tune feels a little loose. The vocal ain't horrible but it's a little picthy in spots. Not too bad overall.
The bass is way too loud for me... either that or everything else is too low.
There's too much mid range generally. The snare sounds like it's been dampened and the guitars aren't present enough. Kick's a bit boomy, not very tight and crisp.
Try dropping something around 800Hz, across everything.
I like the tone of the tune..I dont know it so its fresh to me..
the drums are the area that need the most attention...I could hear everything else working much better with bigger drums..
I think the snare need some boost around the 6-8khz to give is presence, also look at cutting it a little in the mf's maybe around 200-250, if you have a bottom mike option also maybe try giving the rattle a little boost in volume
The kick is a little boomy, look at giving it a peak around 80 - 100ish..just scan and see what gives it a better thump..at the moment its all boom at the bottom end..maybe pass a little of it away before 80Hz??
The vocals are a little pitchy...but thats what we're born with so they dont really bother me..the drums you can fix
Sorry I should have made myself clearer. I think all those things I mentioned are because of there being too much low-mid. That's why I suggested the 800Hz reduction on everything.
As I said previously..."copy the intensity of the vocal". I can barely hear the vocal, and what I can hear sounds bored. It's a bit hard to get beyond that. But aside from the vocal being much worse/quieter ... it is a better instrumental mix.
Not a huge fan of either band in this case (not that anyone cares - just had to throw that in there), but I am certainly very familiar with this tune. I like the arrangement a lot. Don't know if that is borrowed entirely from the foo fighters, but I think this tune really works better for me as a more rocking upbeat number.
As for the mix, the first one was really muddy and muffled and not to my liking. This one is much better in terms of the instruments, but the vocals are almost entirely absent (?).
Despite the improvement, there are really two prominent forces in this mix - the boomy kick and the sizzling guitars. IMHO, everything else in the track is fighting with those two things. I walked away mid tune to get a beer from the fridge not 20 feet away and all I could hear was the thud of the kick and the scratch of the guitar sounds.
Maybe just me (and remember, I really like the idea of what you're doing with this) but I think you have a ways to go to achieve the proper balance of sounds here. And bring the vocals way up!
Everyone above has said it already.
I think the playing is competent, the arrangement is interesting. I don't hear the looseness. There was a bit of pitchyness in the vocals, but that didn't worry me particularly.
I haven't listened to the newer version, but the bass on the first was too loud for my taste, and the drums were lacking bite.
Is that you singing? Are you unsure about your voice? It sounds like you are very inhibited in your singing, then trying to cover it up. I reckon more energy in the vocals would lift the song dramatically.
Good job covering this challenging tune. It isn't perfect; all the issues have been pointed out to you. Despite all of that, I am impressed that you undertook the song to begin with.
Nice work.