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Hi all,
Between busy work projects, I have tried to start a new demo from an idea that I had for a song. It's a pop-rock song about a young woman who throws her life away as a prostitute.
The song is in a very incomplete and early pre-demo stage right now, but I thought I would post the general idea here for early feedback regarding the lyrics, which are also incomplete and fluid right now. After I work out the entire arrangement, and finish the lyrics and demo vocals, I may prevail upon Jimmy and co. over in the mixing forum for their expert help, if they are willing and feel that the song is worthy of a better mix than my feeble skills can produce. ;-)
The next stage now is to finish the arrangement, complete the lyrics for the bridge, and re-record the vocals for the demo.
Feedback on the lyrics is kindly appreciated...
I added the vocals for verse 1 only to give an idea of the melody's structure.
https://www.box.com/s/5n146xo9l3oetc33st2x
Harlot's Sleeves
Words and music by Joseph Spain
Created with ChordPulse 2.5 and Acoustica Mixcraft 6.0
Produced by Joseph Spain
CD: Harlot's Sleeves
Demo recording
Copyright: Joseph Spain 2012, 2013
Verse 1
Dark falls on the city
and she waits for love
It's not the kind of life
a heart in love thinks up
What will turn the corner when
She smiles through tears
and sells her skin
She's built her life on sorrow
now she pays in sin
Chorus
No angels pay her seller's fee
Her tears will mirror what you see
No fairy tale will save her life
A harlot's sleeves will never dry
Verse 2
Night goes on forever
as she prays for love
It's not the kind of mercy
that her heart deserves
Strangers turn she's cornered in
She's bought and sold and used again
They bid and buy her body
in her red light's sin
Bridge
??? lyrics soon
Between busy work projects, I have tried to start a new demo from an idea that I had for a song. It's a pop-rock song about a young woman who throws her life away as a prostitute.
The song is in a very incomplete and early pre-demo stage right now, but I thought I would post the general idea here for early feedback regarding the lyrics, which are also incomplete and fluid right now. After I work out the entire arrangement, and finish the lyrics and demo vocals, I may prevail upon Jimmy and co. over in the mixing forum for their expert help, if they are willing and feel that the song is worthy of a better mix than my feeble skills can produce. ;-)
The next stage now is to finish the arrangement, complete the lyrics for the bridge, and re-record the vocals for the demo.
Feedback on the lyrics is kindly appreciated...

https://www.box.com/s/5n146xo9l3oetc33st2x
Harlot's Sleeves
Words and music by Joseph Spain
Created with ChordPulse 2.5 and Acoustica Mixcraft 6.0
Produced by Joseph Spain
CD: Harlot's Sleeves
Demo recording
Copyright: Joseph Spain 2012, 2013
Verse 1
Dark falls on the city
and she waits for love
It's not the kind of life
a heart in love thinks up
What will turn the corner when
She smiles through tears
and sells her skin
She's built her life on sorrow
now she pays in sin
Chorus
No angels pay her seller's fee
Her tears will mirror what you see
No fairy tale will save her life
A harlot's sleeves will never dry
Verse 2
Night goes on forever
as she prays for love
It's not the kind of mercy
that her heart deserves
Strangers turn she's cornered in
She's bought and sold and used again
They bid and buy her body
in her red light's sin
Bridge
??? lyrics soon
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