Copyright that song, dude!
Further proof that it's not the tools, it's the talent. Excellent song, BTW.
Only a few tiny criticisms.
1) I don't really care for the splash. But I know you've gotta work with what you've got, and I've certainly heard worse. I'd really love to hear a detailed blow-by-blow of how you did the drums. Call me a geek, but I find that stuff interesting.
2) For the sake of old farts like me (who I realize you're not really trying to appeal to), the vocals could be just a tad more intelligable (sp?).
3) The intro needs to be a little louder in relation to the body of the song, as well as some of the background vocals.
4) I'm not too keen on the way the rythym guitar cuts out to silence. It may be intentional, but to me it makes it sound like a sloppy edit.
Like I said, some of it is probably just a matter of taste, so if it came out the way you intended, feel free to ignore this.
But you really should copyright it, because I think in the right hands it could sell well.
Keep 'em comin'.