Hey that's a pretty good song. Has a sort of Patti Smith feel to it. Nice.
I pretty much agree with everyone else's comments on the mix. It's a little dark and "low-fi". That's not a big deal though. It can be fixed. From what I can tell, and maybe I'm wrong, but the drum tracks seem to be tracked very well with a nice sounding kit and a good performance. Are they real? Maybe samples? They're just not mixed/processed quite right. That's just a matter of twisting knobs and pushing buttons until you get em shined up and popping. As for the guitars, it's hard to escape that "fuzzy" guitar sound when recording direct. Nothing compares to an actual mic in front of an actual speaker.
I only got to hear the song once, so this is just what I noticed on the first go-round. I kept getting an error message while trying to listen again. I didn't pay too much attention to the lyrics or vocals. I'll try again later.
Nice song though. Keep at it. It's gonna be really good once you get it all sorted out.